The Surfer



On a very cloudy morning I sat on the beach,
With the ocean within my reach.
I wanted to spend some time on my own.
To sit in the sand and be all alone.

I listened to the waves as they crashed to the shore.
I closed my eyes and I listened some more.
After a few minutes, I heard a voice say,
Good morning! Hello! It’s a beautiful day!

She slowly approached with a board under her arm.
I’m here to surf! She said with some charm.
She smiled and said I hope you’re doing well.
I’m going to attempt to conquer the swell.

I watched as she ran out into the drink,
And disappeared under the water in a quick blink.
She broke the skin, and climbed onto her board.
One of her ankles attached to the cord.

As I sat back down in the sand,
The further away she paddled from land.
I had to admit, my interest was piqued.
The beautiful surfer, I found quite mystique.

I watched as she attempted to ride a wave.
Ten times she fell, but the surfer was brave.
When she failed for the twelfth time,
I was certain it was the end of the line.

She proved me wrong when she tried it once more.
She spilled into the water as I watched from the shore.
The surfer sat on her board for quite a long while,
Then paddled again while wearing a smile.

I wondered to myself, what would it take?
How many attempts, and what was at stake?
When thirteen falls became twenty-three,
The surfer slowly sauntered out of the sea.

She looked at me, smiled, and said it’s not my day.
I failed repeatedly, but I know that’s okay.
There’s always tomorrow, and I’ll try again.
I know in my heart I’ll eventually win.

I’ll never stop trying, that wave will be mine!
And on that day, it’ll feel so divine.
Whatever you’re facing, and whatever you do,
Never give up, and I’ll cheer for you, too!

About this poem

This poem was written for AJ, my most favorite surfer in the world.

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Submitted by bkizzle on October 30, 2023

Modified by bkizzle on November 08, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AABB CCDD EEFF GGHH IIXX JJXK CCLL MMNN DDXX KKOO
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,784
Words 388
Stanzas 10
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4

Brian M. King

Brian M. King, a veteran of the U.S. Navy, has been writing stories, and poems, ever since he was able to put a pencil to paper. He’s a storyteller, poet, and screenwriter. His screenplays and poems have received awards in a variety of contests. His poem, The Surfer, which is featured in his debut poetry book, Out of the Darkness, was an October 2023 contest finalist. Brian can be found jotting down stories regarding topics such as overthinking, depression, anxiety, self-love, loneliness, self-transformation, and more. Brian lives in Greensboro, NC with his dog, Rocky, and his cats, Coco and Lulu. more…

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4 Comments
  • Vixility
    Congratulations on the win! Loved the structure and positive message of this piece.
    LikeReply 13 months ago
    • bkizzle
      Thank you!
      LikeReply3 months ago
  • Soulwriter
    "She looked at me, smiled, and said it’s not my day.
    I failed repeatedly, but I know that’s okay.
    There’s always tomorrow, and I’ll try again.
    I know in my heart I’ll eventually win."

    Loved these words!
     
    LikeReply 13 months ago
    • bkizzle
      Thank you!
      LikeReply 13 months ago
  • Bev11
    Such a fun poem! Wonderful imagery, easy read, with a positive message. Lovely!
    LikeReply 23 months ago
    • bkizzle
      Thank you!
      LikeReply3 months ago
  • BACH54
    Well written with good rhythm. The poet captures the attention of the reader who gets a good view of the surfer and is excited to know the end result. A great story of a challenge and the positive attitude of someone who was defeated but hopeful.
    Well done! 
    LikeReply 13 months ago
    • bkizzle
      Thank you so much!
      LikeReply3 months ago

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