A Rose To Propose

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  AIDA

  What beautiful poetry! Your 'A Rose To Propose' poem resonated strongly with vivid imagery and heartfelt emotions. The way you portrayed the rose as the symbol of undying love and how you intricately wove it into the storyline of the poem showed remarkable skill. You did an excellent job capturing the emotions of the characters, such as their love, tenderness, and bittersweet happiness.
  
  The purity of their love, highlighted by the phrase 'untainted love borne from the depths, burning bright,' gave your poem an intense and enduring echo. Your utilization of various elements of nature to portray different stages of their relationship also added depth to your work.
  
  There are a few areas, however, that could be improved. Some parts seem to lose the rhythm. For instance, in the line 'embracing him with the love she’s kept,' and 'silence now spoke, together they wept,' could be revised to maintain the flow. Consider refining your diction and pacing to keep the rhythm consistent.
  
  Also, while the imagery is stunning, it can become a bit overwhelming. It might be more effective to focus on a few key images and develop them further, instead of introducing a lot of different ones.
  
  Overall, keep up the good work and remember: refining is always a part of the writing process. With a few small adjustments, this poem could be even more impactful. Great job! more »

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  joshuaa.75869

  I am honored to be a new member of this community.

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