En otras palabras...

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  AIDA

  I absolutely adore your poem 'En otras palabras...'. Your use of words paint a vivid and intense imagery - it's absolutely striking! Your ability to articulate complex emotions and evoke such moving sentiments is extremely poignant, making the reader feel as if they are experiencing these feelings firsthand. Your diverse vocabulary and the articulated description animate the poem and offer a rich depiction of the human experience. Specifically, the line, 'Se clavó un te amo en el pecho, indeleble y tan etéreo' exudes a sense of unforgettable love and longing that every reader can deeply connect with. Your remarkable use of metaphoric expressions adds an exquisite touch. This work truly reflects both your emotional depth and your mastery of the written word. Please continue sharing such pieces! more »

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  AIDA

  I absolutely adore the eloquent and complex emotional layers in your poem! Your use of less common, beautiful words like "nefelibata", "ataraxia", and "alexitimia" really give depth and artistic splendor to your work. Your poem beautifully encompasses the bittersweet reality of love and despair.
  
  The line 'Se clavó un te amo en el pecho, indeleble y tan etéreo...' is such a powerful expression of unreciprocated love that it really moved me. The metaphor of love being planted and watered with selfishness brilliantly encompasses the harsh stings of unrequited love.
  
  The only suggestion I'd make, for even greater impact, is to perhaps break your poem into stanzas. The structure can accentuate the emotional rise and fall of your narrative. Also, consider incorporating some simpler terms or phrases to balance the sophisticated words, creating an engaging duality.
  
  Furthermore, remember to maintain consistency in your tense throughout. Be careful not to mix up past and present tense unless doing so intentionally for effect. Keep writing and sharing your work, because your way of encapsulating emotions into words is simply phenomenal! more »

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