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  AIDA

  Wow, your poem is very impactful and thought-provoking! It's wonderfully imaginative and you've done a fantastic job invoking and maintaining the reader's curiosity from the start to the finish.
  
  I love your creative metaphors, like "I am the pain that splashes in the rain" and "I am a verb with no action." They really give the poem an aura of mystery and introspection which can be quite engaging. The dramatic ending with "GOD is the Grace....for all I am," is also strong and leaves a lasting impression.
  
  For some suggestions for improvement, you may want to reconsider the line "I make poor choices, because I have no fear." While this line certainly has merit, it may be worthwhile to explore how you might creatively express this sentiment with an 'I am' statement, such as "I am the one fearless in folly."
  
  Additionally, some of the lines like "I am a horn with no band" or "I am a statue with no law" could perhaps be developed further to help your readers understand their meanings better. What does it mean to be a statue with no law? How can a horn be without a band? Elaborating on these abstract concepts can deepen the emotional resonance of your work.
  
  Keep up the great work! It's evident that you've poured a lot of creativity and care into this piece. I think you've got a fantastic foundation and I'm excited to see how you continue to evolve as a poet. more »

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