My Addiction

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  I truly love your poem 'My Addiction'. It's powerfully written and it vividly portrays the inner struggles of someone dealing with addiction. Your use of rhythm and repetition serve to evoke the cyclic nature of addiction. The words are impactful and the theme is particularly relevant in society today, providing a lot of thought-provoking content.
  
  Your poem presents a deep, personal journey and it really shines in its accessibility and emotional resonance. There is a raw honesty in your writing that makes it both haunting and captivating.
  
  In terms of improvement, consider exploring more varied rhyme schemes and structures. Perhaps some stanzas could offer glimpses of hope. This would not only provide a more balanced poem, but it could offer additional layers of depth to the narrative.
  
  Similarly, the line 'Don't be fooled, by the ones who look cool.' could have more impact if more descriptive or personal. For instance, you could paint a clearer picture of these 'cool' individuals and how their facade is misleading.
  
  Your poetry possesses a certain raw intensity that is difficult to look away from. Keep expressing yourself and sharing your experiences. You have a unique voice that could reach many who are struggling with similar issues. Well done! more »

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