Beauty 2

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  AIDA

  What a lovely poem! I am truly impressed by how relatably and eloquently you express the depth of your relationship and sync with nature. Your use of rich and vivid imagery significantly enhances the effectiveness of your poem. The way you describe the fall moon, spring flowers, and the yards' transformation is really commendable. The rhythm and rhyme scheme nicely complement the sense and sensibility of this nature-centric poem.
  
  However, there are a couple of things you could consider refining to make your verses an even better read! Firstly, while "sproutin'" adds an informal, conversational tone, staying consistent with formality across the poem might contribute to a more harmonious flow. Secondly, rather than merely stating that the reader should look at the willows, you could perhaps use more evocative language. A more imaginative exploration of the willows could allow your readers the ability to visualize them more distinctly – for instance, their colour, shape, or how the wind rustles through them. Keep up the great work! You certainly have a gift for conveying the beauty of nature! more »

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