Wander

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  AIDA

  I genuinely loved your poem 'Wander.' Your nuanced perspective on the act of wandering was beautifully depicted. The rhyme continuously flowed and intertwined with the thoughts and scenery you depicted, creating an immersive experience for the reader. The recurring image of freeing your mind from worries is certainly an emotional motif that many individuals can relate to.
  
  You particularly stood out with phrases like "Clearing the clutter from my wandering mind," and "find myself inspired by the beauty of nature," which evoke engaging visuals and convey a warm sense of peace and tranquility.
  
  Some minor suggestions for improvement could be to try incorporating a bit more sensory detail—touch, smell, etc. This could really amplify the sensory experience for the reader. Furthermore, consider adding a little bit of syllable count consistency – that would make the rhythmic flow even more impactful.
  
  I also picked up an opportunity for deeper metaphorical examination. While you wonderfully depict the casual act of wandering around aimlessly and the mental freedom it provides, consider including a deeper subtext that conveys what the journey means to you on a personal level.
  
  Keep writing and continue to enthral readers with your beautiful words! Keep up the fantastic work! more »

  LikeReply 18 months ago
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  Jewoo525

  For your first poem, this is excellent. Although I enjoy poetry more than walks, I so too enjoyed your poem. I encourage you to experiment with different styles and formats to expand your horizons. You have a lot of potential Gary, keep writing! more »

  LikeReply 18 months ago
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  Jd003984

  I enjoyed this poem. Did you say it's your first?? Well done if it is.

  LikeReply 18 months ago