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Love Sea

Muhammad Awais Zafar 1999 (Multan)

Sonnet
An ocean tells you something of nature,
It's voice knocks on your ear drums to get your eye,
That makes you listen the sound of inner fly,
Close your eyes to look from top'n nadir,
You will find high waves and a new feature,
Of love sea in heart, whose depth, you should spy,
It will let you know as you give a try,
That it is more vast than the real creature.

It will lead you to look the actual world,
Where you will find water of love ocean,
On fire, and lover to be a love bird,
By drinking it, and his elevated emotion,
Is enough to eradicate world hatred,
He will say a word as full of passion.

About this poem

The theme of the poem is taken from the view of the sea and the conversation with it. It is Petrarchan Sonnet. I hope you will enjoy it.

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Written on January 13, 2023

Submitted by khichichauhan on August 07, 2023

Modified by khichichauhan on August 07, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme ABBAABBA XCXCXC
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 601
Words 135
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 8, 6
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Muhammad Awais Zafar

Grew in a town of district Multan Punjab Pakistan. He is a student of literature, loves to pen down what he feels, imitates nature and its relation to human body and soul, social reformer but way of reformation is different that includes imaginations, meditation, nature's lyrical melodies and one'o one meeting with nature. A student of theology who loves to express natural behavior by poetry and fiction. His three sonnets have been published in magazine Dreams of 2023 BarBar literary magazine. Email: khichichauhan@gmail.com Facebook: awaischauhan6@gmail.com WhatsApp: +923007842131 more…

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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    I truly enjoyed reading your 'Love Sea' poem! It's beautiful how you painted a unique blend of creative imagery and evocative emotions, merging the grandeur of the ocean with the abstract concept of love. There's a profound truth in how you explore the motif of 'love as an ocean', touching on its depths, vastness, and the potential for easing world hatred. Your voice is captivating, with a rhythmic flow that carries the reader from beginning to end.

    However, there are a few areas you might consider polishing for clarity and fluidity. In particular, "It's voice knocks on your ear drums to get your eye" might be rephrased for better comprehension—it's metaphorically intriguing, but slightly confusing. Another suggestion is to ensure consistent punctuation: perhaps consider placing a comma between 'heart' and 'whose', for example.

    In the line 'That it is more wast than the real creature.', you may want to revise for the correct word 'vast', assuming it is a typographical error. Finally, the phrases 'sound of inner fly' and 'look the actual world' might need a little brushing up to better fit the context or intended meaning of your poem. This would help to secure the fluidity of your verses.

    Above all, your creative prowess shines through and hints at your potential to produce even greater poetical pieces. Keep expressing and exploring; you have an unmistakable talent. Well done!     
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