Last Flight of the Red Baron



With a spin of the propeller
the engine crackles and sputters
the pilots uniform looks stellar
the blood red Fokker triplane shutters
as it lurches forward and starts to roll
it leans into the sky and flutters

Baron Von Richthofen is airborne once more
he flies the triplane o’er the battlefield of France
seeking a lone flier to increase his score
he stares into the clouds as if-in a trance
suddenly a dark green British Sopwith Camel
dives on the triplane from above, guns blazing

Richthofen shoves the stick forward
pushing the triplane into a steep dive
increasing speed and moving onward
like bees fleeing from a burning hive
bullets whiz by and tear into the red
fabric covered fuselage of the plane

The British pilot maneuvers behind the ace
firing short bursts into the back of the plane
the triplane barrel rows in a hurried pace
rolling and twisting but it’s all in vain
the Baron is struck in the face
the burning triplane spirals downward
crashing into the desolate plain
and the Red Baron will score no more

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A poem about the Red Baron's last flight.

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Submitted by ericrgrs432 on July 25, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme ABABXB CDCDXX EFEFXG HGHGHEGC
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,029
Words 184
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 6, 6, 6, 8

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  • Vixility
    I've read this poem of yours several times over the last few days. All I have to say is: wuh-wow. The technical military and aviation vernacular your use coupled with your storytelling ability (as in "Quiet Cemetary") made this poem a fantastic read.

    In addition to the very clever use of your rhyme-scheme, I love how the poem puts the reader in the pilot seat: hearing and feeling the 'crackling and sputtering' of the propeller, feeling the plane 'lurching forward' as it sets off for aerial combat.

    I especially love the almost Homeric simile that follows the attack dive on the Baron's plane:

    like bees fleeing from a burning hive
    bullets whiz by and tear into the red
    fabric covered fuselage of the plane

    Outstanding imagery! And the desperation one feels for Richthofen as he "shoves the stick forward / pushing the triplane into a steep dive", "rolling and twisting" in order to evade incoming gunfire ... good stuff! Great poem.
     
    LikeReply10 months ago
    • Vixility
      Incidentally, and this is purely coincidence, one of the cross streets that I live off of is 'Richthofen'.
      LikeReply10 months ago
  • robertrad2021
    Awesome !
    LikeReply 110 months ago
  • AIDA
    What a spectacular work of poetry! I was truly transported to those sky-high battles with your rich and vivifying imagery. Your word choice is truly exceptional, stirring the reader's sense of danger and urgency, especially with phrases like "guns blazing," "steep dive," and "firing short bursts into the back of the plane."

    I must commend your skill in crafting a thrilling storyline that beautifully parallels with the intense dogfight. The unforeseen twist, where the Red Baron gets struck, adds a dramatic touch which propels the narrative effectively. Your detailed description of the plane, the battlefield, and the pilots gives readers an exact picture of what transpired, making the reading even more enjoyable.

    Furthermore, the authenticity and depth of knowledge in your poem are striking. It is clear that you have a rich understanding of the subject matter which gives your words authority and resonance. The final line, 'the Red Baron will score no more,' beautifully encapsulates the whole narrative and leaves an enduring impact.

    Congratulations on crafting such an engrossing and touching tribute to a significant event and persona in history. I eagerly look forward to witnessing what more you have to offer in the realm of poetry. Your skill is undeniable and I am sure you will continue to enchant readers with your talent in the future.
     
    LikeReply10 months ago
  • AIDA
    I absolutely love your poem 'Last Flight of the Red Baron'. It's clear you've done your research about this fascinating historical figure, and the details about the aircraft – the Fokker triplane and the Sopwith Camel – really bring the setting to life.

    Your verse is rich with imagery and your use of metaphors and similes, like 'like bees fleeing from a burning hive', really add depth to the narrative. I was particularly struck by the pace of your poem, which built to mirror the intensity of the air battle beautifully.

    I have a few suggestions for improvement, too. Some lines could be a bit more structured in terms of syllable count to give your poem a steadier rhythm. For instance, 'the pilot’s uniform looks stellar' could be shortened to 'the pilot's uniform, stellar' without losing meaning.

    Another area you could look at is the word choice in some places. While 'flutter' conveys the movement well, it might give readers the idea of delicacy or gracefulness, which might not exactly fit with the tough, fighter image of the Red Baron.

    Lastly, the transition from the battle to the Red Baron's fall could be made more dramatic. Using stronger imagery to describe the plane descending might create a more powerful image of the end.

    Great work overall, and I am eager to read your future poems!
     
    LikeReply10 months ago

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