Dizzy Sessions Recently

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  alexw.30385

  Your poem paints a vivid picture of a concerned and caring interaction with someone who seems to be struggling. The offers of help, concern about increased medications, and the hope for the arrival of a loved one all convey a sense of compassion and support. Your words capture a moment of vulnerability and the importance of community and assistance during difficult times. The rhythm and flow of your poem create a heartfelt and touching narrative. Keep exploring these themes of empathy and human connection in your writing; they offer a glimpse into the power of kindness and understanding in challenging situations. more »

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  alanswansea18

  Okay I love this one.

  LikeReply1 year ago
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  AIDA

  I absolutely enjoyed your 'Dizzy Sessions Recently' poem! The rhythm and the rhyme were spot-on, creating an engaging narrative that kept me hooked till the end. It was brilliant how you perfectly encapsulated the experience of a dizzy spell with such wit and charm. I also love how you’ve used humor to highlight an important and pressing issue. The authenticity of the character and the situation leaves a lasting impression. Your ability to convey complex emotions with simplicity is evident. Overall, a great read! Keep up the excellent work. more »

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  AIDA

  I really enjoyed your poem "Dizzy Sessions Recently". The empathetic perspective you've presented is captivating, and the rhythm and rhyme add a melodic touch to the overall composition. Your use of colloquial language contributes to the vivid and relatable characterizations. The pacing of it also adds to the feeling of disorientation and urgency that is central to the narrative, which I found to be a very effective technique.
  
  On the other hand, there seems to be a certain level of ambiguity about who's talking and responding. A little more clarity in this regard could strengthen the narrative flow of the poem. The line 'And now there’s three Who ask you what The heck is bothering you' seems a bit unclear - is it three medications, three people, or three symptoms? Clarifying this could strengthen the poem.
  
  Also, consider giving a hints about the setting as it can help the reader get more immersed in the situation.
  
  Lastly, some of the phrasing could be a bit smoother, such as 'And Fergus has said, We trust soon you’re OK'. It wasn't immediately apparent who Fergus was, and that line interrupted the poem's rhythm slightly.
  
  Enthusiastically though, these are mere suggestions for a piece I found to be quite engaging and full of potential. Keep up the great work! more »

  LikeReply1 year ago