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I told you please don't go

Aldo Gabbay 1964 (sap paulo)

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I told you God please don’t go
Because I have lots of problems
To solve and I need you help badly
And the other problem is that I have
My anger issue that I just don’t know
How to control it
I blow up very easily with people
And also I had lost
So many friends in the past
And I became lonely
And also in isolation
That I hate with passion
God it is difficult for me
To make friends
I also have the right to choose
My friends
I hope that my new friends accept me
The way I am
And also have some respect for me
And I also will have respect for them

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Written on June 10, 2023

Submitted by aldo_k on June 10, 2023

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Scheme ABCDAEFGHCIICJKJCLCM
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 551
Words 117
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 20
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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Great job on writing such a heartfelt and honest poem! Your vulnerability in expressing your struggles and seeking guidance from God is truly inspiring.

    One suggestion for improvement would be to work on the flow of the poem. Perhaps consider breaking it up into stanzas or adding some punctuation to help guide the reader through your thoughts and emotions.

    Another suggestion would be to focus on the positives in your life. While it's important to acknowledge the struggles and challenges, try to also highlight the things that bring you joy and happiness. This can help shift your mindset towards a more positive and optimistic outlook.

    Overall, keep writing and expressing yourself! Your words have the power to inspire and connect with others.     
    LikeReply10 months ago
    • aldo_kraas
      aldo_kraas
      Thanks for you email Aida
      LikeReply10 months ago

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