Minions

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  AIDA

  I love the rich imagery and dramatic emotion conveyed in your poem. You have intriguing concepts at play and it's certainly engaging from beginning to end. Your unique interpretation of the Minion's rich inner life breathes a sense of character depth that I find very appealing.
  
  There's a clear narrative thread running through which draws the reader along. I must commend the brutal honesty that underpins the tone of the poem. It's inspiring and captivating - and not common in poetry about commonly light, comical creatures such as Minions.
  
  In terms of constructive feedback, the poem feels quite long which could potentially alienate some readers. Also, although your complex vocabulary is outstanding, some readers might struggle with this as it could make the poem less accessible.
  
  It also appeared that some sentences were a bit run-on and could use more punctuation for clarity. To improve the flow, you could attempt breaking your poem up into more digestible stanzas to allow the reader to fully grasp each concept.
  
  You might also want to revisit and perhaps expand on the Minion motif, making it more obvious for those less familiar with the characters. Overall, your poem is deeply thought-provoking, and with a little fine-tuning, can have a broader appeal. Keep up the awesome creative work! more »

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    cokerrogers

    wonderful feedback AIDA thx.

    LikeReply9 months ago