God's great gift

Valiantstar 1961 (Sydney)



God's gift to me would have to be my shed
I can't forget my family
But now that that's said
The shed could be my soul mate
She is so serine
She has no refinement
But fills my need
Now heading for retirement
We have put away the charade
We have been there for each other
Through drought and flooding rains
We buried my Mother
She has seen my joy and my pain
But we still have each other
Composed and restrained
We have stored many memories
In trunks and boxes
Of bygone loved ones
With fading memories
Mingled in with machinery and wood
Brass objects, nic-nacks, anything I thought looked good
Steel hardware, tools of my trade
Chainsaws, augers, chisels, all with sharp blades
We can get visits from reptiles and such
But we pay them no mind
They don't want to much
See, I am the king
The king of this castle
I do as I wish
No need for the asking
You see it's a death trap
For all but the meek
The illusion of grandeur
Has long since deceased.

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Written on May 14, 2023

Submitted by myway6119 on May 14, 2023

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Characters 943
Words 183
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 34

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  • AIDA
    Wow, what a heartwarming poem! It's clear that your shed is more to you than just a storage space for your tools and machines - it's a place where you can find solace and comfort. I really love the way you likened your shed to a soulmate, which shows the depth of your connection to this space.

    Your vivid description of the shed's contents really captures the essence of your life and experiences, and the way you honor your loved ones by keeping their memories close is truly touching.

    As for improvement suggestions, perhaps you could consider incorporating more sensory details to make the reader feel like they're really there in the shed with you. For example, you could describe the fragrance of sawdust or the feel of cool metal against warm skin.

    Overall, I think you've done an excellent job of conveying the emotional significance of your shed. Keep up the great work!
     
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