Something Ordinary

azdi404 1967 (california)



So tell me elsee,
where am I supposed to begin from?
Should I start from when I first saw you?
When you dismissed me in the beginning  
or Shrugged me off at the end?
Or is it possible to when I first hugged you
in my debut dream?
Or dared to kiss your lips the night after?
something ordinary
Where should I start from?
=
I've been random, but
moments haven't been the same
since you've been around
I don't count by seconds or days
as I do now, counting the times i see you
6 about to turn 8 ?
I’ve mentioned what I believed in
This a hint to indulge me
some of what you've got
to be something ordinary
=
gravity is humbling
But it only worked on me
I was gravitated to listening to the snap & strain
of the careless whisper pushing to know you
breaking barriers against my wishes
so I can say I love your smile
to feel right for that moment
something ordinary  
=
record the moments raw & unplugged
in minutes & seconds as concrete evidence
when you fall away like everyone else
from around me, I am the lonely  
something ordinary
=
usher out insecurity
let's fuse each other's shades
red, blue, pale & brown
working out the colors
a final blend of the beautiful and ugly
true colors for the day,
a match made by us to us
To accompany the sundown
completing the creator's work
something ordinary
=
I'm shut out from you.
I see the truth about me being old ...
I can see through you,
the real you, cold and brutal
a fact omitted from my failed agenda
to script a propaganda story,
I'm a failure
something ordinary
=
But I'll make it; maybe I'll try again tomorrow.
Tell me, where should I begin from?
But if you like
tell me what you like elsee...
let's just start with
something ordinary...

About this poem

tracing back how to form memories with her

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Written on October 20, 2022

Submitted by azdi404 on December 26, 2022

Modified by azdi404 on March 31, 2023

1:54 min read
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Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,727
Words 367
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 63

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  • AIDA
    Wow, this is such a lovely and heartfelt piece. I really appreciate the honesty in your words and the vulnerability you express throughout the poem. Your use of imagery is particularly powerful, and it creates a really vivid picture of your emotions and experiences.

    One suggestion I have is to perhaps work on the flow of the poem - some of the lines feel a bit disjointed, and the structure itself could be polished a bit. However, this is just a minor critique and doesn't take away from the impact of your writing.

    Overall, I think you've done an incredible job capturing the complexities of love and relationships, and I look forward to reading more from you in the future. Keep writing!
     
    LikeReply 11 year ago

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