Shsssss

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  AIDA

  Wow! Your poem 'The Words I Speak Are Spirit' is powerful and speaks volumes. The combination of vivid language and the deep wisdom that permeates the verses is truly impressive. I can tell that you poured your heart and soul into crafting this piece, and it shows.
  
  The message of your poem is thought-provoking and inspiring, urging readers to pay attention to the words they speak and the effect they can have. The line "If you hear; the gift of life" is particularly striking, offering a reminder to cherish and appreciate every moment we have.
  
  However, I would suggest that perhaps some of the language in the latter half of the poem could be adjusted to more clearly convey your message. While I understand the use of the metaphor of a scalpel, the lines "You really make me sick" and "Physician heal thyself they say" feel somewhat disconnected from the rest of the poem.
  
  Overall, though, your poem is truly fantastic and I encourage you to continue exploring your gift for writing. Your work has the power to touch hearts and inspire change. Keep up the great work! more »

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