Analysis of My Angel (A Poetic Narrative) (Written from a young girl's view point)



I remember that one fateful day:
The rain was pouring down; Streets were wet with tears; I looked into your face;

Just a short time before,
I had been in my car with my friends; We had just graduated; Sunshine and life were everywhere;

We were laughing,
And having a good time; Then, all at once, Everything disappeared;

I was there,
Lying on the ground; Looking into your face; Your hand touching me;

It was dark, though midday;
There were people running all around; Someone was screaming; I heard it, it was my friend;

I strained to move,
To go to her side, to comfort her; But the weight of my body, Made me feel like I was pinned down;

I touched my head;
My hand came back red; Blood was everywhere; I felt sick to my stomach;

And then, there you were;
I could barely see you; My eyesight was blurred; You touched me;

You said, everything would be alright;
Then I felt something; Something heavy on me; It made me feel warm;

In the midst of my cold;
In the midst of my dizziness; In the midst of the street; It made me feel warm; I laid there for a long time;

For what seemed like forever,
You stayed with me; You talked to me;

You made me feel better;
In the midst of everything; You made me feel better; I couldn't see your face;

Just an outline of you;
As they put me in the ambulance; I wanted to thank you; But you were gone;

Then I was inside;
 The doctors and nurses; Everyone there helping; Making me feel better;

I asked about you;
Nobody knew; I searched my memory; My blood-soaked, tear stained memory;

You were gone.


Scheme AB XC XX CD AX XX XX ED XX XX ED EB FG XE FD G
Poetic Form
Metre 101011101 01110110111110111 101101 111011111111100101010 1010 01001111111001 111 1010110011111101 11111 10101010111101111111 1111 111011100101111011111111 1111 1111111101111110 01110 1110111111111 1110111 1111010101111111 001111 00111100001101111111111011 1111010 11111111 111110 001110111110110111 11111 1111001001101111101 11101 01001010110101110 11011 1111110011111100 101
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,502
Words 291
Sentences 2
Stanzas 16
Stanza Lengths 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 1
Lines Amount 31
Letters per line (avg) 38
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 73
Words per stanza (avg) 18
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Submitted on May 19, 2017

Modified on April 26, 2023

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Donald Loudon

I started to write because of the great feeling of release, and being able to do something of my own that I enjoyed. Since then, writing has become a way of life for me, and I enjoy it thoroughly. I write about things I feel strongly and or know a lot about. more…

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