Analysis of Day dreaming



...I'm on the beach with the little mermaid
as she strokes her long blond hair
seashell brush, the blue waves rush
against my long legs, I feel her vivid stare...

...I'm falling up with a bunch of balloons
tied around my wrist, winds start blowing
as I watch the city beneath grow smaller
the bleak worries and gray dreams start going...

...I'm up and over where you think I am
I'm where the seasons turn and go
I'm seeing what reality fears might
break it, bend it, or start to bow...

...I'm twirling up and around the night sky
starlights alighting, pouring crystalline streams
following at Dawn's first breath of brand new eyes
and the morning shower of dew and sun beams...

...I'm sorry to say I'm not right here
I might see shapes, but it's not what I saw
I'm hearing voices but it's not what I heard
I'm here, but I'm there, not here at all...

...Honestly I'm not sorry to let you know
that while silence was listening to your breathing
I was off someplace much more attractive
I'm soaked in the violet colours of day dreaming.


Scheme XAXA XBXB XCXX XDXD XXXX CBXB
Poetic Form Quatrain  (67%)
Metre 110110101 1110111 110111 01111110101 1101101101 101111110 11101001110 0110011110 1101011111 11010101 11011011 11111111 1101001011 1110101 10011111111 00101011011 110111111 1111111111 11010111111 111111111 10011101111 111011001110 111111010 110010011110
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,010
Words 190
Sentences 12
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 24
Letters per line (avg) 33
Words per line (avg) 8
Letters per stanza (avg) 131
Words per stanza (avg) 32
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Submitted on May 01, 2011

Modified on March 05, 2023

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