Analysis of Once I Was a Hardened Soldier
Imagine a grey world
Where it only rains ash
The clouds are black
And the ground is like powder
The winds stir up an aftermath
Of victory and of power
Yet...only defeat remains
Only those strong enough
To sail those winds of change
But look out now
Through the windows of your mind
And you'll see blue skies
With yellow sunshine
You'll see such a world doesn't exist
There is no black and no grey
There are no winds sailing me
Pushing me to a change
Only my mind has a fog of war
And I'm stuck inside
A skeleton key around my neck
And echos of lost goodbyes
I sift through the debris
And I find myself
Bloodied and bruised
Yet still fighting, Breathing
Telling myself to pull through
I'll never surrender
I'll never quit
Once I was a hardened soldier
But now where do I fit?
I can't let go of those lost
And appease the ghosts I live with...
Bury these faces that haunt my eyes
And sing me memories for a night lullaby
Does that mean I'm weak?
And drown in the water underneath the bridge?
Am I unfit to wear the honor?
Bearing a weight
Of the regret from the things I did...
Or didn't do
What I could have
Should of done
Is being blinded by the ash
From the black clouds hiding my yellow sun
Once I was a hardened soldier
Scheme | xaxbxb xxc xxdx xxec xxxd exxxf bgBg xxdx xxbxx fxhah B |
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Poetic Form | Tetractys (31%) |
Metre | 010011 111011 0111 0011110 0111110 11000110 10101 101101 111111 1111 1010111 01111 1101 111011001 1111011 1111101 101101 101110111 01101 010010111 010111 111001 0111 1001 111010 101111 110010 1101 11101010 111111 1111111 00101111 101101111 01110010110 11111 0100100101 110111010 1001 100110111 1101 1111 111 11010101 1011101101 11101010 |
Closest metre | Iambic trimeter |
Characters | 1,270 |
Words | 289 |
Sentences | 8 |
Stanzas | 11 |
Stanza Lengths | 6, 3, 4, 4, 4, 5, 4, 4, 5, 5, 1 |
Lines Amount | 45 |
Letters per line (avg) | 21 |
Words per line (avg) | 5 |
Letters per stanza (avg) | 87 |
Words per stanza (avg) | 22 |
About this poem
I wrote this in remembrance of those I saw killed in Iraq between 2003 and 2004. Specifically, November 2, 2003, when I was the medic assigned to treat and recover soldiers from a Chinook helicopter that was shot down over Fallujah. We lost 16 that day. I tried to save them.
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Written on October 14, 2021
Submitted by Nathaniel40 on February 08, 2023
Modified on April 19, 2023
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