Analysis of Two Cold Bodies



You're in my mind, more often than you should be.
Burned behind my eyes
What sweet lies
We've been dead inside
Two cold bodies sharing the same bed
Giving each other head
Wishing we were dead

The love died and my life did too
You killed me softly
But that doesn’t matter to you
Crying myself to sleep
Rocking in my bed
Grinding my teeth and sitting on my hands

I loved you
Did you love me too?
I gave you everything
I'd give you my soul if that's what you wanted
Here take it, what's mine is yours
You want it, you got it

I know I had my hand in this too
I wish I knew back then what I do now
Maybe the love wouldn't have gone
I'm sorry I drove you away
I guess we weren't meant for forever
Nothing feels the same


Scheme ABBXCCC DADXCX DDXXXX DXXXXX
Poetic Form Tetractys  (20%)
Metre 10111101111 10111 111 11101 111010011 101101 10101 01101111 11110 1111011 10111 10011 1011010111 111 11111 11110 11111111110 1111111 111111 111111011 1111111111 10011011 11011101 1111011010 10101
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 703
Words 147
Sentences 3
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 7, 6, 6, 6
Lines Amount 25
Letters per line (avg) 22
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 138
Words per stanza (avg) 37

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Disclaimer: TRIGGER WARNING ⚠️ if you are triggered by -sexual language Please click away. Viewer Discretion is Advised This is a breakup freestyle poem

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Written on June 09, 1997

Submitted by Jae_Succa on October 29, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

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