Analysis of One's Journey



The appearance of one's journey,
From the sidelines...
To look and seem easy.
By those who temporarily,
View this scene to leave and compare...
To others.
While snacking on chips, icecream...
Candy or whatever spares them,
The facing of reality.
And what it takes...
That requires discipline to participate in.
Will always be something done,
Someone says they can better do.

Yet...
For whatever the reason,
People like this prefer to have it known...
Their main talent and skill,
Is to have acquired an expertise...
In critiquing professionally,
What it is someone could do much better.

'Yes!
Much.'

'I'm glad you asked.
Normally I would keep my opinions,
To myself.
But...
The flaws?
Now...
If they spent more time,
Improving upon what they do.
Instead of attempting to get,
More attention to have others perceive...
That which is witnessed to see,
Took so much thought and time.
When anyone blind can not ignore,
Every blemish and flaw.
Sitting as if a Boulder,
On top of a sand dune!
I might...
If to be asked,
Give my reluctant suggestions.'

'Well...
From my point of view,
Not one TV camera.
News reporter.
Or adorning screaming fans,
Seem not too concerned...
About your opinion.'

'I don't intend to make my comments,
Come close to approach...
Tasteless envy or jealousy.
Or have you believe I think,
It is all about me. When it isn't!'

'I know.
And how dare someone like that,
Can attract others to believe...
What they see and close up is so,
Let's see...
What is that word?'

'Passable?
Suitable?'

'Yes!
That's it.
SPECTACULAR!'

'Spectacular?
I said 'suitable'.

'I couldn't think of the 'S'.
Thank you.'

'No other place would I rather be!


Scheme axaaxxbbaxxcd ecxxxaf Gx hixxxxbdejabxxfxxhi xdxfxxc xxaxx kxjkax ll GxF Fl gd a
Poetic Form
Metre 00101110 101 110110 1110100 11111001 110 110111 1011011 010110 0111 101010010100 111101 1111101 1 110010 1011011111 111001 111010101 001001000 111111110 1 1 1111 1001111010 11 1 01 1 11111 01001111 01101011 1010111001 1111011 111101 11011101 1001001 1011010 111011 11 1111 11010010 1 11111 1111100 1010 1010101 11101 011010 110111110 11101 10101100 1110111 1110111110 11 011111 10110101 11101111 11 1111 100 100 1 11 0100 0100 11100 1101101 11 110111101
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,596
Words 294
Sentences 52
Stanzas 12
Stanza Lengths 13, 7, 2, 19, 7, 5, 6, 2, 3, 2, 2, 1
Lines Amount 69
Letters per line (avg) 18
Words per line (avg) 4
Letters per stanza (avg) 103
Words per stanza (avg) 24
Font size:
 

Submitted by lpahtillah on July 25, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

1:27 min read
8

Discuss this Lawrence S. Pertillar poem analysis with the community:

0 Comments

    Citation

    Use the citation below to add this poem analysis to your bibliography:

    Style:MLAChicagoAPA

    "One's Journey" Poetry.com. STANDS4 LLC, 2024. Web. 30 Apr. 2024. <https://www.poetry.com/poem-analysis/105730/one%27s-journey>.

    Become a member!

    Join our community of poets and poetry lovers to share your work and offer feedback and encouragement to writers all over the world!

    April 2024

    Poetry Contest

    Join our monthly contest for an opportunity to win cash prizes and attain global acclaim for your talent.
    0
    days
    22
    hours
    29
    minutes

    Special Program

    Earn Rewards!

    Unlock exciting rewards such as a free mug and free contest pass by commenting on fellow members' poems today!

    Browse Poetry.com

    Quiz

    Are you a poetry master?

    »
    Who wrote the poem "A Dream Within A Dream"?
    A Edgar Allan Poe
    B William Blake
    C Elizabeth Barrett Browning
    D Percy Bysshe Shelley