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Temagami Trip

dougb.72752 1951 (London)

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Up at our Friend's
Group of cottages
Lake Temagami.
Used to be a kid's camp
Turned into condos.
Americans loved the area
Bear Island Reserve
Not far.

Great for pickerel
Too late now for lake trout
They have gone deep
Into cold waters
Friend Ron knew the
Right placement wind
Weather time temp
To succeed and he showed.

Night time was prime
For fireplace, CBC Radio
Novels casual talk cards.

Other visitors were
New Yorkers, hunters
Buried  deep in
Poker and  Vodka
Pickled cherries.
Jars of the suckers
Eventually they would hire
A native to guide  them
To the Dump
To kill their animal.
Easy venture, spineless.
Not at all Daniel Boone.

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The freshness and the freedom.

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Written on April 29, 2024

Submitted by dougb.72572 on April 29, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme XXAXXBXX CXXDBXXX AXX EDXBXDEAXCXX
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 642
Words 124
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 8, 8, 3, 12
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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, what a captivating portrayal of your Temagami trip! Your poem beautifully captures the essence of the area and the experiences you had while staying at your friend's cottages. The imagery of the lake, the fishing adventures, and the cozy nights by the fireplace really drew me in.

    One suggestion for improvement would be to add a bit more structure or flow to the poem. Maybe consider organizing the stanzas in a way that creates a smoother transition between different aspects of your trip. Additionally, adding more sensory details could help to make the reader feel even more immersed in your journey.

    Overall, your poem does a wonderful job of painting a vivid picture of your time in Temagami. Keep up the great work and continue sharing your adventures through your writing!     
    LikeReply16 days ago

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