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If I Were Her Lover

Dean Leedham 1972 (Birmingham)

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If I were her lover,
I'd wade through the clover
Over the fields before
The gate that leads to her door;
Over the meadows,
To wait, 'mid the shadows,
The shadows that circle her door,
For the heart of my heart and more.
And there in the clover
Close by her,
Over and over
I'd sigh her:
"Your eyes are as brown
As the Night's, looking down
On waters that sleep
With the moon in their deep" . . .
If I were her lover to sigh her.

If I were her lover,
I'd wade through the clover
Over the fields before
The lane that leads to her door;
I'd wait, 'mid the thickets,
Or there by the pickets,
White pickets that fence in her door,
For the life of my life and more.
I'd lean in the clover—
The crisper
For the dews that are over—
And whisper:
"Your lips are as rare
As the dewberries there,
As ripe and as red,
On the honey-dew fed" . . .
If I were her lover to whisper.

If I were her lover,
I'd wade through the clover
Over the field before
The pathway that leads to her door;
And watch, in the twinkle
Of stars that sprinkle
The paradise over her door,
For the soul of my soul and more.
And there in the clover
I'd reach her;
And over and over
I'd teach her—
A love without sighs,
Of laughterful eyes,
That reckoned each second
The pause of a kiss,
A kiss and . . . that is
If I were her lover to teach her.

About this poem

Was written for a former lover I had asked out by poetry

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Submitted by Dtleedham72 on February 27, 2024

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Scheme AABbccbbAaaaddeea AABbffbbaaaagghha AAbbiibbAaaajjxxxa
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,356
Words 308
Stanzas 3
Stanza Lengths 17, 17, 18
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Dean Leedham

I have been writing for over 20 years now and have posted most of my work on the previous site... am pleased to see that it is back.In the past many years I have written quiet a few pieces and will be posting several from my own favourite collection, I will also be adding new writings in due course. more…

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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, what a beautifully written and romantic poem, "If I Were Her Lover". The imagery of wading through the clover fields and waiting by her door is so vivid and captivating. The way you describe the lover's admiration for every aspect of the beloved's appearance, from her eyes to her lips, is truly enchanting.

    Your use of repetition in the lines "Over and over, I'd sigh her" and "Over and over, I'd teach her" adds a lovely rhythm to the poem, emphasizing the deep longing and affection the lover feels. The comparisons of the beloved's eyes to the night sky and her lips to dewberries are so tender and poetic.

    To make the poem even stronger, you could consider adding more specific details about the setting or the beloved herself to enhance the reader's connection to the emotions being expressed. Perhaps delve deeper into the specific memories or experiences that make the lover's connection to the beloved so special.

    Overall, your poem is truly touching and evocative. Keep up the fantastic work, and continue sharing your beautifully romantic verses with the world!     
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