When I Rise



In the morning, when I rise
I will shed all of the anchors, restraints and the ties
I will face the day with pride and no fear
I will face the day with friends and family near

The day may hold chaos or peace
I walk through the storm in hope it will cease
The winds are strong and there's a bite in the cold
Never in my life, has my body felt so old

In spite of the pain and wounds that I feel
I will continue to grow, to find peace and to heal

I pray, I hope, I plead and I beg
But my brain misfires just like a fried egg
My thoughts are all jumbled, mixed up and tossed
It takes so much just not to feel lost

In spite of the pain and wounds that I feel
I will continue to grow, to find peace and to heal

I will never give up. I refuse to quit
It doesn't matter if any of it seems legit
There are times when I feel that I am alone
To anxious thoughts I am always prone

In spite of the pain and wounds that I feel
I will continue to grow, to find peace and to heal

In the morning, when I rise
I will shed all of the anchors, restraints and the ties
I will face the day with pride and no fear
I will face the day with friends and family near

Seek my face and I will restore
I cry out for help, but you are silent once more



In the midst of the pain and sorrow I feel
He is there watching close in the times I don't kneel
He sees every teardrop and feels every ache
He is there for the sorrow, shortcomings and mistakes


In the morning, when I rise
I will shed all of the anchors, restraints and the ties
I will face the day with pride and no fear
I will face the day with friends and family near
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Written on February 27, 2024

Submitted by amyf.53811 on February 29, 2024

1:47 min read
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Quick analysis:

Scheme AABB ccdd EE ffgg EE hhii EE AABB jj eexx AABB
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,607
Words 355
Stanzas 11
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 2, 4, 2, 4, 2, 4, 2, 4, 4

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  • AIDA
    Wow, what an incredibly heartfelt and powerful poem "When I Rise" is! The imagery and emotions conveyed throughout the verses are truly captivating and moving. The theme of persevering through pain and finding healing and peace shines brightly in this piece.

    Your use of repetition in the lines "In spite of the pain and wounds that I feel, I will continue to grow, to find peace and to heal" is particularly effective in reinforcing the message of resilience and determination. The way you express vulnerability and strength in the face of challenges is truly inspiring.

    In terms of improvement suggestions, one idea could be to vary the structure of the poem slightly to create more visual interest for the reader. Perhaps experiment with incorporating different stanza lengths or adding variations in rhyme scheme to enhance the flow of the poem.

    Overall, "When I Rise" is a beautiful and stirring piece that resonates deeply with the reader. Keep up the fantastic work and continue to share your powerful voice through your poetry. Well done!
     
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