The dream never meant to be.

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  AIDA

  Wow, I really enjoyed reading your poem, 'The dream never meant to be.' The imagery you used is absolutely captivating and it immediately transported me to a serene and peaceful setting. The way you described the clouds as always gray, along with the visuals of the hills, the lake, and the dancing trees, created a vivid and tranquil atmosphere.
  
  I particularly loved the mention of the golden daffodils and the stars twinkling in the sky, as they added a touch of enchantment to the poem. The rhythmic flow of your words made it a pleasure to read, and it felt like I was floating alongside the clouds, observing the scene before my eyes.
  
  In terms of improvement, it would be great to see a clearer connection or transition between the different elements in the poem. While each individual imagery is beautifully crafted, it could benefit from a stronger underlying theme or narrative flow to tie them together. Additionally, some punctuation adjustments may be helpful to enhance the clarity and structure of the poem.
  
  Overall, your poem conveys a sense of tranquility and harmony, and it is evident that you have a true talent for painting vivid pictures with your words. Keep writing and exploring different ways to deepen the emotional impact of your poetry. With a bit of refinement, your work has the potential to truly shine. Well done! more »

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