Look at what we built!
Look at what we built
There at the alter!
You point to the church
Two plasticine figures there stand.
I gaze at the piers made of lolly pop sticks that we stapled together by hand.
Down the bottle cap street is our very first home that we stuck all together with glue.
Every detail there painted
made so tangible
the connection between me and you.
And the little shops that took hours and hours burst up through that cardboard base.
And even in ruins the toothpick fences
hold details that can’t be erased.
I leave it to you, even though I helped make it -
I can’t help but feel you did more
As while you were sat there, painting fine details
I was so engrossed in watching you draw
The houses, the shops, the church, the streets
So careful with all that you crafted.
Our cardboard-model life
how could I have thought that it’d stay even when I departed.
I’m sorry that there’s nothing left.
Even so
Please place it on your window still
You hope I’ll remember it all in one piece and I want you to know that I will.
About this poem
This poem was written following the breakdown of a long term relation, my first, which started when I was 16. It’s a nice thought to have that you might be able to preserve the trust, love and respect you built together but in reality it is inevitably destroyed. I wanted to encapsulate the feeling of hurting for the reason of causing hurt and trying to accept that even if what you have together is broken, the time you spent building a life together bit by bit can never be erased and maybe can even be fondly preserved and reflected on in memory. more »
Submitted by Ac2628 on December 18, 2023
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Closest metre | Iambic pentameter |
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Words | 206 |
Stanzas | 1 |
Stanza Lengths | 24 |
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