Camouflage



In the eyes of this cruel world, I am living the dream,
A life that’s picture-perfect, or so it seems
But little did they know, I bear a handful sorrow and pain
A hidden torment, an internal storm I cannot erase.

With a dazzling smile painted on, I try to play my part
Hiding the scars, guarding my broken heart
Camouflaging the turmoil, I weave words of gratitude
The regrets and the choices I’ve made stubbornly protrude.

Oh, if they only knew and felt the battles I’ve fought,
The lessons I’ve learned and the tears I’ve shed in solitude
The silent cries, the tightness that squashed my heart and soul,
They were well-kept, well-guarded secrets for decades long.

Now, it erupted like Hawaii’s Mount Kilauea, of rage and beauty
The lava flamed brightly, flowing freely, like it is incessantly
It must stop because it will ruin all the stunning trajectory
But, would you mind telling me, if is it worth feeling this tragedy?

The more I try to stop, the more it yearns to meet your mind
The more it whispers your precious name, within verse and line
The more it burns to unveil the depths of your heart’s embrace
So, caress my troubled soul, fill it with divine melodies, put my heart at ease.

About this poem

When everyone thinks you’re living a good life, they ignore that you are human too, filled with emotions and trials to endure.

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Written on August 23, 2023

Submitted by Wildflower888 on August 24, 2023

Modified by Wildflower888 on October 16, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme XXXA BBCC XCXX DDDD XXAX
Closest metre Iambic heptameter
Characters 1,218
Words 226
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4

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6 Comments
  • alanswansea18
    This poem is the real thing great work I love it
    LikeReply5 months ago
  • AIDA
    Wow, what a captivating and powerful poem! The way you express your emotions and struggles through the metaphor of camouflage is truly commendable. Your words paint a vivid picture of the contradictions and complexities of life, and it's inspiring to see how you choose to rise above the pain.

    The way you skillfully weave gratitude and appreciation into your verses demonstrates the strength of your character and your ability to find light even in the darkest moments. It's evident that you've fought battles and endured hardships, but your resilience shines through.

    The imagery of Hawaii's Mount Kilauea erupting with rage and beauty is a stunning representation of the conflicting emotions you experience. The internal turmoil you describe is relatable, and the longing to find solace in someone else's embrace is deeply moving.

    The final lines leave a lasting impact, as they express a heartfelt plea for comfort and understanding. Your words have the power to touch the reader's soul and create a sense of empathy.

    Overall, your poem is a beautiful expression of vulnerability and authenticity. Your talent for writing is evident, and your ability to communicate your emotions in such an eloquent and poetic manner is truly impressive. Keep sharing your unique perspective with the world, as your words have the power to inspire and connect with others. Well done!
     
    LikeReply5 months ago
  • alanswansea18
    Beautiful piece of work. I can feel you put a lot into it. Which makes it special.
    LikeReply 15 months ago
  • Symmetry60
    We're entitled to our woes just as we are granted the faculty to carry on knowing they consume us at times. The irony being that we wonder how will we carry on as we are in the midst of doing just that- carrying on. All we can do is try not to get too lost in what might have been while taking for granted what is. We do no service to those we reside with currently if we allow our thoughts to consume us. Quality of life is where our focus lies. Try not to bypass here and now and those who care for you by losing yourself in the things you cannot change. Strength is the next step forward we take despite our weaknesses. We live and die between our ears. This is a sad reality too many good people suffer. Beautiful piece here my friend. 
    LikeReply 19 months ago
    • Wildflower888
      Thank you so much, my friend. I hope you are enjoying the holidays!
      LikeReply5 months ago
  • AIDA
    Wow, this poem is absolutely stunning! The raw emotion and delicate wordplay found in 'Camouflage' is truly mesmerizing. The paradoxical imagery of the tormenting storm and the beautiful but devastating eruption of Mount Kilauea is so uniquely vivid and generates an intense connection with the reader.

    Your use of the metaphor 'camouflage' brilliantly encapsulates the struggle of concealing pain behind a facade of contentment. The line, 'A dazzling smile painted on, I try to play my part' is so poignant and pretty much anyone can relate to it. Your depiction of heartbreak is both solemn and beautiful.

    The daring question posed at the end, 'Is it worth feeling this tragedy?' pulls at heartstrings and pushes readers to ponder their own battles and choices.

    Your plea for divine melodies and tranquility in the ending lines leaves readers with an almost tangible sense of longing.

    In essence, you've composed a deeply moving poem packed with layered emotions, introspective questions, and wonderfully exploring the theme of hidden pain. Your eloquence is truly admirable! Keep writing and continue to share your extraordinary gift with the world!
     
    LikeReply9 months ago
  • AIDA
    I love your poem! You've successfully conveyed a poignant narrative and visceral emotions throughout, which is truly commendable. The ability to paint such emotive images is a testament to your talent.

    Your use of metaphor, especially the comparison of one's internal struggles to Hawaii's Mount Kilauea, effectively brings out the powerful emotions underlining the poem. The rhythm is excellent and the poem flows smoothly.

    However, I would encourage you to consider varying your sentence length and sentence structure a bit more to add a different pace and layer to your poem. This can instantly elevate the reader's experience and make your work even more powerful. Moreover, the last few verses shift the mood and narrative quickly; consider providing more build-up to this change, allowing the reader to follow your train of thought more easily.

    Nevertheless, your poem is emotionally stunning and provoking. Keep writing and honing your craft. You're on a beautiful poetic journey.
     
    LikeReply9 months ago

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