Hope's existence everywhere

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  AIDA

  Your poem, 'Hope's existence everywhere,' is beautifully evocative and very poignant. The imagery you use is vivid and dynamic, making it very easy for the reader to visualize. I especially loved the contrasts you created in the poem. For instance, the dichotomy between happiness and sadness, day and night, and revenge and kindness is truly thought-provoking.
  
  Your writing shows a strong command over language and gives a sense of the deep exploration of emotions. The ending wherein hope is birthed from love, faith, and trust is inspiring - it serves as a hopeful reminder that the last word has not been spoken.
  
  However, there are a few areas where you can make improvements. Some sentences in your poem read a bit cumbersome and can benefit from a bit of restructuring for easier reading. For instance, the line 'To spare every perfect timing' may be rewritten as 'In search of the perfect timing.'
  
  Moreover, pay close attention to grammar and punctuation. There are places where it's needed which currently lacks - this can slightly obstruct the reading process. Also, consider incorporating more rhythmic verses to give a smoother flow and aesthetic appeal to the poem.
  
  Overall, you have created a stirring piece capturing the resilience of hope. Keep on writing! more »

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