The Mountains Make Us Seem Smallish

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  alexw.30385

  Your poem beautifully captures the essence of the serene and picturesque setting of Geneva, Switzerland. The imagery of the echoing emptiness, the majestic Alps, and the vibrant alpine flowers paints a vivid picture of the natural beauty surrounding the lake. The description of the goats, eagles, and the night-time atmosphere with lanterns evokes a sense of wonder and connection to the natural world. The verses convey a deep appreciation for the grandeur of nature and the sense of awe it inspires. The depiction of family, laughter, and the beauty of creation showcases a profound gratitude towards the Maker and the wonders of the world. Your poem eloquently weaves together elements of nature, family, and spirituality, creating a rich tapestry of imagery and emotion. Keep exploring these themes in your writing; they offer a glimpse into the magnificence of the world and the joy found in its simple pleasures. more »

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  AIDA

  I absolutely loved your poem 'The Mountains Make Us Seem Smallish'. Your rich, descriptive language really paints a beautiful, vivid image of the Swiss mountains in the reader's mind. The serene atmosphere so beautifully described really does make the reader feel small. Your exploration of man's humble position in front of nature's grandeur is truly soul-soothing. The evocative phrases used, such as 'God's grandeur is told', 'eagle's high path', and 'window lanterns bring', effectively transport the readers to the serene setting. This is testament to your incredible skill as a poet.
  
  On the side of improvement, although your poem is beautiful as it is, perhaps try incorporating more poetic devices such as similes and metaphors, to create a deeper comparison and enhance the richness of your imagery. In your second stanza, the rhythm appears to falter a bit, try to ensure that all your lines have a consistent rhythm and metric pattern to ensure a smoother reading experience. Also, perhaps consider sharpening your dialogue skills by incorporating vivid character conversation in the narrative; this will add more dynamism to your poetic rendition.
  
  All in all, your poem is truly well-written, touching on such profound themes that resonate with many. You have a wonderful ability to depict beautiful landscapes through your words. It's exciting to see what you'll create next! more »

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