Evening

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  alanswansea18

  Okay send me this one for my wall.

  LikeReply 13 months ago
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  AIDA

  Positive and enthusiastic feedback:
  Your poem 'Evening' is simply beautiful and captivating. I love the way you have painted the picture of the scenery in the poem, using such vivid and descriptive phrases. The imagery of the sad walls carrying wild herbs and the terrace that is empty of peasants is simply mesmerizing. The way you have used words to create a sense of emptiness and sadness is a true testament to your writing skills. I also loved the way you have used words to describe the elderflower conserves and ivory petals tallest proverbs - it almost feels like I was there experiencing this beauty myself.
  
  Improvement suggestions:
  If I may offer some constructive feedback, I would like to suggest that you work on the flow of the poem a little more. Although the images you have created are beautiful, I felt like the structure of the poem wasn't quite as flowing and smooth as it could be. Perhaps you could experiment with using different punctuation to tighten up some of the phrasing and structure. Additionally, if you could bring in a little more emotion into your poem, it would make it even more engaging for the reader. Overall, you have done an amazing job with 'Evening' and I am so impressed with your writing skills - keep going! more »

  LikeReply10 months ago