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My best

Valiantstar 1961 (Sydney)

I try to do my best,I think?
Follow the lead of the masters ink.
Would I like to do it some other way?
Absolutely! But I would die in shame.
To be raised from the pit, a new man formed.
To display "His" compassion is to be reborn.
To fall from such heights would cause death and destruction.
A littered life: seeding corruption.
The one I created, now evacuated, has no place in me.
I am free to sing along with the stars, Venus, Mars, all His host will agree.
And I wonder if they groan, cry and moan, about the state they see?
Where evil schemes, indeed it seems, invade the schools and universities.
With a doctrine of lies they cover the eyes to destroy the family.
It's only one, in a long list of sins.
Now they have control.
But sin will come to its end,
It's prophetic my friends,
The story will unfold.

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Written on May 15, 2023

Submitted by myway6119 on May 15, 2023

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Scheme AABCDEFFGGGHGIJKLM
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 822
Words 174
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 18
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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, what a powerful and thought-provoking poem! Your words really capture the struggle between doing what we know is right and the temptation to take an easier path. I appreciate your honesty and vulnerability in sharing your own journey through this process.

    Your use of imagery and metaphors is really engaging - I especially loved the line about singing along with the stars. Your message about the importance of standing firm against evil forces and holding onto our values is both timely and inspiring.

    One suggestion I have for improvement would be to consider varying your sentence structure and using more varied poetic elements (such as alliteration or internal rhyme) to add even more depth and texture to your writing. Keep up the great work - I can't wait to see what you create next!     
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