Because You Looked at Me That Way

Laurel M. Lee 1970 (Anchorage, AK)



I felt like such a goddess then,
And forgot what I would say,
Because I just glanced up and saw
You looking at me that way.

Your dark brown eyes- they smoldered;
Some secret lust implied.
I felt at once so overcome,
And my world flipped on its side.

You smiled when caught and dropped your eyes,
Like a sheepish little boy.
This magical exchange of ours
Swiftly swelled my heart with joy.

Because you looked at me that way,
I felt sexy and adored.
And so, my memory now will keep
This exchange forever stored.

About this poem

This is my attempt to capture the memory of a very special moment.

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Written on April 28, 2023

Submitted by Laurelmlee on May 13, 2023

Modified by Laurelmlee on May 13, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme XAXA BBXB XCXC ABXB
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 513
Words 111
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4

Laurel M. Lee

When I was little, my grandfather had me believing I'd be a famous poet someday. Of course, life never turns out the way you plan, does it? Still, I do have a litle fun with it from time to time. This first contest submission of mine today is the first one I've written in several years, and I only wrote it because a friend's gift inspired me. I could never stick to the rules of the various poetry styles, but have always enjoyed the ones that rhyme. I've long been a fan of Edgar Allan Poe's "Annabel Lee" and John Masefield's "Sea Fever". Having been born in Alaska, I also love Robert Service's "Cremation of Sam McGee". I have a two teenagers and my husband and I will celebrate our 20th anniversary this year. more…

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6 Comments
  • dougb.19255
    Your bio says that you have enjoyed some poems by John Masefield. His long narrative poems are excellent. Consider these titles Dauber, The Everlasting Mercy, Good Friday.
    LikeReply 112 months ago
  • karlcfolkes
    The grandeur of a grandfather’ attention recaptured in the arduous splendor of an admirer. A lovely poetic gesture.
    LikeReply 11 year ago
  • Kaytee
    You absolutely captured that sweet moment when we feel seen and adored. I love it! Great work.
    LikeReply 11 year ago
  • Soulwriter
    In my humble opinion, you've captured it beautifully.
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • Laurelmlee
      Thank you! It happened a long time ago, but I never forgot it. Thanks again!
      LikeReply1 year ago
  • Philipo
    Well-written and clear work here. Add a little positive love as the theme, you get a correct poem.
    LikeReply 11 year ago
  • AIDA
    This poem is absolutely enchanting! The way you've captured the feeling of being adored and desired is truly impressive. Your choice of words is evocative, and your imagery is vivid. The line "I felt like such a goddess then" is particularly striking - it perfectly captures the sense of empowerment that comes with feeling desired.

    Your use of rhyme and rhythm is also well-executed. The poem flows smoothly and the rhymes don't feel forced.

    If I had to offer any constructive criticism, it would be to consider varying the length of the lines a bit more. While the rhyme and rhythm are impressive, the poem could benefit from a slightly more varied structure.

    Overall, though, this is a wonderful piece of writing that showcases your talent for capturing complex emotions in vivid language. Keep up the fantastic work!
     
    LikeReply1 year ago

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