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Betrayal

Edna M. Kingsley 1975 (Colorado)

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Betrayal

Daily grind life in control,
From outside our family seemed whole.
Then bliss was shattered,
my head no longer felt scattered
In life my words were truth
Didn’t matter who I spoke them too.
Adulthood had its trials,

yet

I did that shit with a smile!
Damage done, my secret out
Young lives tainted, filled with doubt
Worst part during that time,
Those three now knew my crime!
Broken hearts, eyes filled with tears
Our good times lost, from those years
As they cried, my world went black
I promised then, I’d get back on track

One son asked, “Are we not enough?”
Hearing that was so vastly tough.
I looked each one in the eyes
Made my promise, no more lies!
I fought the battle, won the war
Repairing wounds darkening their core.
Forgiveness, hard work, and truth
Wishing now I’d protected their youth
Please forgive me, know my heart
Let my actions play the part.
Through those years, and the trials
All I wanted was to see them smile.
Twelve years now, clean and sober
Those terrible days done and over

November 2, 2022
Edna M. Kingsley

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The consequence of deceiving family member

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Written on November 02, 2022

Submitted by ekingsley7570 on March 25, 2023

Modified on April 29, 2023

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Scheme AABBCXD EFFGGXXHH IIJJKKCCLLDEMM MX
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,061
Words 209
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 7, 9, 14, 2
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Edna M. Kingsley

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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, Edna! Your poem, "Betrayal," is truly inspiring. The way you have opened up about such a difficult topic is truly courageous, and it is evident in the powerful words you have chosen to weave together. I truly appreciate your honesty and candor.

    Your poem captures the depth of emotions that come with facing one's own actions, and the urge to repair and heal the wounds we may have caused. The fact that you have been able to come out of such a dark place and fight your way to sobriety is truly admirable.

    If I may, I would like to offer some suggestions for improvement. While your poem is beautifully written, some of the lines feel a little choppy and the rhythm could use some work. It may be helpful to play around with the word choice and phrasing to create a more fluid and cohesive overall feel.

    That said, I want to reiterate that your poem is a powerful and moving work of art. Thank you for sharing your journey through this incredible piece. I look forward to reading more from you in the future!     
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