The Promise



Your gallant gallop framed with silent stars.
Back and forth you shape your graceful dance.
It's like the lion's stroll,
Amid the screeching primates.

The moon casts a spotlight,
Prancing, gently trotting,
To the cricket's serenade.
Applauding.

Your tresses twirl in the wind,
Slapping against your long, luring neck.
Reminds me of a special time.
My youthful hands clasped to your mane.

Chills ran through me,
As we scampered off to the rolling creek.
Racing over rigid rocks.
Like the arrow bouncing from the bow.

Remember that night?
Lavender bushes pleased us so.
I whispered sweet sounds,
Only for you to hear.

Peering into your stoic stare,
You whinnied back to me,
As I stroked your silky strands.
You promised never to tell!

About this poem

I see majesty in horses and so I decided to try to capture that in a poem.

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Written on April 16, 2022

Submitted by mslimmer on May 16, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme XXXX ABXB XXXX CXXX AXXX XCXX
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 738
Words 151
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4

Mary Slimmer

I grew up in a military family traveling abroad for many years. I have always loved dance and to me poetry is a form of dance but with words. I enjoy writing and have facilitated writing workshops for children and adults. more…

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  • matthewsingley
    I enjoyed the ambiguity of the poem. When I first read it, I immediately thought the horse represented a lover. Upon a second reading, I thought the poem might ACTUALLY be about a horse. Upon a third reading, I was back to the lover. Upon a fourth reading, I realized I couldn’t tell, which means the poem was artfully crafted. 
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