Analysis of an october sunset

the shadows shifted
on concrete porch facing the sea
where the sun makes it journey into the night.
the usual afternoon breeze
turns the vane now and then,
while the sounds of traffic build up
on the boulevard below
signal the flood of humanity
in a hurry to go somewhere
to their families or to wherever.
most of them as they scurry
would not have time to watch the sunset.
like most of our lives
the only trace of the passing days
are the wrinkles on their faces.

the seasons too shifted the shadows
along the rows of ageing bottles of wines
lazily lying unmoved since they were
consigned in their racks a long time ago,
they have gone from sour to dregs.
when their corks finally crumbled
their bottles revealed
but the stains of the liquids long gone.
there is no need for requiems
for unsipped wines and untouched bottles.
they are lovely still
even when their spirits are gone.

there was a need to roll down the curtain
to fend off the afternoon sun when it peers in
prying as it does with uncomfortable warmth
just before it dips into the horizon
tracing the silhouette of corregidor island
with blazing vermillion glow.
on an afternoon like this, when the sea is calm
and I am on the sixteenth floor and the sunburst
through october clouds languorously drifting
over manila bay the hint of eternity
lingers on to another day.

Poetic Form
Metre 0110 10111001 10111100101 0100011 101101 10111011 101001 100110100 0010111 1110011010 1111110 11111101 111101 010110101 10101110 01011001 0101111011 1001001110 0101101101 11111011 11110010 11001 101101011 111111 11100110 11101 10111011 1101111010 11100111110 101111010001 10111010010 100011010010 1100101 11011110111 01110011001 10101110 1001010110100 10110101
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,331
Words 241
Sentences 10
Stanzas 3
Stanza Lengths 15, 12, 11
Lines Amount 38
Letters per line (avg) 28
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 360
Words per stanza (avg) 80
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Submitted by S07R06Enopena53 on April 28, 2021

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