Analysis of My Immortal



A townhouse along the beach
a woman trying to escape an evil stepfather
a spoiled, narcissistic stepbrother,
for many years abused and molested her,
and in the step-family, many others

Young, beautiful, 24 years of age,
hid in safety for a while,
until stepdad found her, set her house ablaze
tried to burn her at the stake,
suffocating under the fires,
body charring, eyes sheading tears,
got saved by a scientist,
a biomedical engineer

Death was approaching,
Clock was ticking, she was dying
to save her life,
injected her with a mysterious concoction,
made of stem cells, nanites in suspended animation,
and 32 of the Earth's elements,
cold to the touch like nitrogen

She awoke hours later, somehow alive,
in her dance with death, she survived
"Don't worry, you're alright" he said,
I've injected you with a vaccine,
one that's brought you back to life,
healed you inside out in ways unseen,
take a look at your scars
they're all gone,
from the fire, blood, pus, and charred skin,
disappeared like magic,
skin glowing and radiant more than ever
true beauty shining through,
your hair,
still long, flowing beautifully
heart still beating normally
even your clothes and jewelry are fine too

You've been given more than a second chance,
a chance to be more than human,
nothing can hurt you,
you'll be forever young
you cannot age, cannot die,
just like me,
I love you,
been watching you for a long time,
love everything about you,
I hope you'll be mine,
my immortal


Scheme XAAAB XXXXBXXX CCDEEXE XXXFDFXXXXAGXHHG XEGXXHGXGXX
Poetic Form
Metre 010101 0101010111010 010101 11010100100 00011001010 1100111 1010101 0111010101 1110101 10010010 1010111 1110100 00100101 11010 11101110 1101 0100100100010 111110010010 0101100 11011100 1011010101 00111101 1101111 10101101 1111111 110110101 101111 111 101011011 01110 11001001110 110101 11 1110100 1110100 10110100111 1110110101 01111110 10111 110101 1101101 111 111 11011011 110011 11111 1010
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,419
Words 253
Sentences 1
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 5, 8, 7, 16, 11
Lines Amount 47
Letters per line (avg) 25
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 231
Words per stanza (avg) 51
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Submitted on August 23, 2014

Modified on March 05, 2023

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