Analysis of Moon’s smile: a translation



Trod half of my life
On the white horse
Galloped away
With endless joy
Treasured smiley pearls
And golden toys

In every step
I bloomed like flowers
Although I knew
I would dry and die next day

Did not give ear to my mind
In tranquility I spoke to my soul
Ripples winged in the depth of sea
Fall of petals and flow of fragrance
Shared and gathered
Between bones and withered skin
I lifted me up to the music of blue
Magically walked and danced
In the white eternal dew

Suddenly unnoticed
A page of black humor conspired
I was not surprised
Accepted as mortal diplomacy
Possessed of my destiny
Yielded by time

Frozen everything
Clouds stars rivers feathers of birds
Flowers and green paths
House of my eternity suffered
Metamorphosed black
Multicolored sailing ship
Turned white
Determination deterred
Time hollowed and promises less
Gifted with
Deserted letterbox
With a of black horse
To live and carry on the rest of life

Moon smiled at me
Show me the black wound
Of its snow white body
And said you see I pained
Despite, with pleasure
I bloom everyday
Like an eternal flower
In the dark of night
Flooding cool beams of light

Metamorphose begun
I felt the deep turn inside
Black horse became dark night
I became the glittering moon
Of snow white sight
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Submitted on December 04, 2013

Modified on April 03, 2023

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