Analysis of Eden



the third installment of the series including poems “Kiss of Death” and “The Loner”
part 1 http://www.poetry.com/poems/464546-Kiss-of-Death
part 2 http://www.poetry.com/poems/466943-The-Loner

I hardly open my eyes again to see
Whether my sinful plan has worked.
Have I become immortal and forever free
Or stayed in world where I was locked?

The eyes feel blinding, blazing light
Making eyelashes flutter, split the air.
Like tiny hummingbird lingers in flight
For its such fragile, brittle wings to bare.

I sense I'm cloaked in mild scent of spring
Compelling all inside to animate.
This nature is untouchable, I've never seen
What's hidden just behind Heaven's gate.

Your absence pangs my chest, I'm lost.
Did Hell seduce you and possess?
I pray you didn't change to wandering ghost.
A lot of theories burst into my mind and obsess.

With desperate shriek I call for you
And stifle, strive to catch my breath.
Wind gripped your twiggy, dovelike body, blew.
We're separated even after death.

I'm sauntering around this sacred place,
Fervidly seeking for some faint sign.
Sign that will lead me to your chiseled face.
I wonder if it changed when you became divine.

Through fragrant trees I find myself in meadow –
Small paradise among that blessed land.
I accidentally glance at figure casting shadow.
Does my excruciating chase come to the end?

Chase for beloved one. You're lying on the grass.
The disappointed eyes pronounce silent question:
“Why did you kill yourself?” Your little dress
Is numbing me and drag attention.

It's stained with white, unblemished blood,
Straight from the heart this blood is oozing.
The holy ground drinks it in leaving the spot
That symbolizes pain your mind's refusing.

Forgotten everything, we share impassioned kiss.
Lust is invading thoughts; they're insecure.
This mortal sin may take away the bliss,
Unveil our wishes, make virgin souls impure.

Into this Eden our wounded love's revived –
Forbidden fruit two hearts with care hold.
Is it a crime to take desired bite?
Will we get banished back to the terrestrial world?


Scheme ABA CXCX DEDE FXXX XGXG HBHB IJIJ KXKX XLGL XFXF MAMX XXDX
Poetic Form
Metre 010101010010101110010 11110111 11110010 11010110111 10110111 110101000101 11011111 01110101 101010101 110101001 1111010111 111101111 0101011100 110101001101 110101101 11011111 11011001 11110111001 0111010111001 11011111 01011111 111101101 110010101 11011101 1101111 1111111101 110111110101 110111101 11001111 101001110101 11010011101 11011110101 00101011010 1111011101 110101010 11110101 110111110 01011101001 1100111010 01010110101 1101011100 1101110101 011010110101 011101010101 100111111 1101110101 1111011001001
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 2,027
Words 343
Sentences 35
Stanzas 12
Stanza Lengths 3, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 47
Letters per line (avg) 35
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 136
Words per stanza (avg) 28
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Submitted on October 09, 2013

Modified on March 05, 2023

1:46 min read
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Den Khaustov

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