Analysis of Soulmates' walking piece of art

Mitee Patel 2006 (Ahmedabad)



I felt a tight knot forming
right into my abdomen,
But also felt the comfort of your presence which always used to put me at ease..
Guess it still does..
Judging by the drooping shoulders of mine,
That were like a second ago as stiff as a body stuck in an icy frost.
As soon as i saw you entering the space.. after the months of silence that felt like an eternity.

I saved myself from losing the hold of that Smile of Mine
which your mother once praised me of...
Not to mention her admirance for the shine in my eyes
अब इन्हें कौन बताए..
That the glint only came within..
when her जिगर का टुकड़ा was around.
Before I could even figure out if these thoughts were delusions or deja vuz..
my attention was quickly shifted
to the only roaming eyes..
that once gleamed upon me while handing over the irish daisies to me this one time
Picked freshly by you from the
field of dandelions

It seemed like the wondering eyes in the room were getting eager to find something..
Or rather someone..
Losing patience..
Second by second...
And then..
Finally resting on mine.

Just then the space filled up with scandalous energy
As my lips' edge curved into a slight nudge..
Letting go of the smile that I was holding back for a long time..
As to give response to the already formed crescent on your face.
And at that very moment..
An unexpected realisation came within both of our hearts...
Of people not being totally wrong about the time when they called us the  precedent of being the soulmates' walking piece of art.


Scheme ABCXDXE DXF XXCXFGXX ABXXXD EXGXXXX
Poetic Form
Metre 1101110 1011010 1101010111011111111 1111 1010101011 10101001111010101101 11111110001100111011110100 1111100111111 11101111 111001101011 1 10110101 10101 01111010111100101101 101011010 1010101 111011110100101011111 1101110 11100 11101001001010101110 1101 1010 10110 01 1001011 1101111100100 1111101011 1011011111011011 1110110010110111 0111010 1010110111101 11011010010101111101001100110111
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,573
Words 307
Sentences 23
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 7, 12, 6, 7
Lines Amount 32
Letters per line (avg) 36
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 288
Words per stanza (avg) 70
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Written on August 25, 2023

Submitted by miteesss2006 on December 27, 2023

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Mitee Patel

16 year old living in Ahmedabad. Wannabe writer. Novels by Colleen Hoover>>>> Personality like Phoebe Buffay. Chai over coffee Simp for Harry Styles. Pizza and waffles are love. more…

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