Analysis of A Taken Way



I lost the most important person in my life today

And yet she walks amongst us

A truly unbearable pain

Uncertain what futures hold thus

A duly insurmountable strain

A sadness has since overcome me

Smiley exterior obscuring weeps internally

Had I known love expired I would’ve taken an absence of leave

‘Coz for me love goes on with no gauges capable of measure WTF just happened?!

I’m a fierce lover…if I love you?!...watch out…I’ma pierce my lover…lose myself in all of her

Including her snores and farts

Snap back to a broken heart

I am in so much pain right now

It takes me forever to do even the most basic and routine tasks because I just drift off and forget what I was doing.

I’ve cried out of pure heart ache and agony

Every moment fearful

Stompped your feet on my heart’s shell

Unleashing gushing falls on our late spring

And I understand that seasons change, that’s just the thing

Because yours was more like that huge climate undertaking

What an effort, and how poetic for Paris of all places to set the stage for the death of both flings

Hard to call it that after 13

Day in ~ week out ~ month in ~ years stack

You chose to store your love when you should’ve unpacked

At least then I could find corroborating evidence contrary to your stated facts

Sing sing my organ atop a peak of her indifference

Seeking a love that spews hindrance

Pressure gets so intense in your presence I just want to get away ~ Bifrost ~ Heimdall

A recurring theme that I thought you had broken

well , I guess you did, just not your recurring theme, but that crimson one

The one that gave itself to you ~ the one that held you above all else except his Creator

Even beyond my own mother

And maybe that’s the price I pay for that traded blunder

Man, I thought I would cliche the rest of my life with her

Instead she neglected me and let me whither

Maybe I’m imagining this but i feel my heart hanging lower inside my chest

Is that even a thing? Sounding more like  a fling

Diamond  status downgraded ~ losing its bling

If your feelings don't suffice for motivating ~ Guiding limbs ~ touching him ~ step by step instructions between lovers? Why is that even a thing?

Maybe I’m being overly dramatic but it just doesn’t feel right, and that is sad

It saddens me beyond a point of expression how we couldn’t make each other happy

But I must adjust and accept that cruel reality

Abandoned in an abyss ~ what a manner to awaken

Yet I’m finally wrapping my head around what’s happened

It seems I had been given away before I was taken


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Poetic Form
Metre 11010101001101 0111011 01001001 01011011 01001001 01011101 10010001010100 111101111011011 11111111101001101110 101101111111110110110 0100101 1110101 11011111 11101011100110001101111100111110 11111110100 1001010 1111111 01010111011 010111011101 0111111110100 11100101011011101101101111 1111110 10111011 11111111101 111111010010010011101 111100101100100 10011110 1011010110111110111 001011111110 11111111010111101 01110111011110111011010 10011110 01010111111010 11111010111110 011010101110 101010011111110100111 111001101101 10101101011 1110101110010110111101001101111001 101101000101111110111 110101011010111111010 1110100111010 010010110101010 11100101101010 111111001011110
Closest metre Iambic heptameter
Characters 2,594
Words 519
Sentences 7
Stanzas 45
Stanza Lengths 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 1
Lines Amount 45
Letters per line (avg) 44
Words per line (avg) 11
Letters per stanza (avg) 44
Words per stanza (avg) 11

About this poem

Written within the past week, it memorializes the heart ache and agony that have embodied my life as of late.

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Written on October 05, 2023

Submitted by peacefultranferofpoetry on October 10, 2023

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A Taken Way

Career trucker sidelined following back surgery. Took some psychedelics for depression and poetry began flowing. Now the plan is to convert the inside of my refrigerated 53’ trailer into an office/podcast/studio/stage at the tail and hit the road with a couple others for a Peaceful Transfer of Poetry: traveling poets ~ sensed an urge and pursued it ~ jumbled words dancing clueless ~ synchronized by yours truly! Travel to art festivals, educational institutions, businesses, just anything to get everyone more involved in poetry - workshops, podcast on the road, cafes, etc… document our travels across the US… myself and a dear friend who’s an amazing activist and poet are committed thus far but we are looking to add 1 or 2 more so if you’re crazy enough…send it! more…

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