Analysis of Old man in mom's care



Here he is today, in his mother’s house
His mental skies sunless
The ancient rivers in him dry
Where once he ran his little feet in the greens of youthfulness
His soul loathes the bareness of the adulthood gardens.
Through dark caverns unmeasured by thoughts, success he sought

Here he in his my mother’s house
Sitting under the old shadeless tree
Sniffing and smoking anything that’d quieten the ceaseless turmoil in his head
Dancing rocks flung from an ancient mystical volcano,
a demonic cacophony of torment
He sits on grandpa’s old stool
Like a helpless fool.

A sordid tale of emptiness.
A life devoid of hope
With dark winds formless
Like smoke from the dope
Shameful forklores
Permeating into now reality
He wished he was sinless
The least not to be guilty.
Grown in years,but like a baby h


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Poetic Form
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Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 807
Words 147
Sentences 5
Stanzas 3
Stanza Lengths 6, 7, 9
Lines Amount 22
Letters per line (avg) 29
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 216
Words per stanza (avg) 46

About this poem

This poem is a melancholic reflection of a life of regret. A man who is still a dependant at old age.

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Written on May 11, 2023

Submitted by amono.16912 on May 11, 2023

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Amon Olisi

The writer is a ex banker a poet, former editor of a Christian Magazine. He has several poems published online. Won the editors choice awards in 2002 for the poem "Enough is enough". more…

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