Analysis of The Eyeshot towards the Center down



Your Eyes were about to shoot towards the Center down–
The light Breeze made no Noise
I know– you promised Him– the Cat
Are you dearer than I– You always were

Why can't you welcome my Passion with open Arms–
Toes released the Overpass–
But wait– take my Hand and look up to our Horizon
The Hereafter– There is a Possibility

I did verily desire your Inclination– It wore you out
Your confusing Signs– like a scattered Puzzle
There is a Dagger in my Heart– I thought you could pull it out–
But you didn’t and you Never will

Those green– Sharp Eyes– Of Him! They will continue to Shine–
In your Heart, like Diamonds
And so– the Whisper of the Cat will remain
The Purring of Him– Sublime

When I Ascertained that you were Ready–
I couldn’t believe what I did
My Feet moved on Instinct–
Towards the Grave you dug– ready to Fall into

I hate you– You want yourself out of my head– I do too
But oh– I love you– You want me to hide far away but I cannot
I just Wish things went back how they Used to
You wish that too– But Without me

There you were– Standing–
I pulled you back–
As you landed on your feet– You walked right through me–
I was a ghost– No matter how hard I tried not to

When I looked into your Eyes– I saw nothing
I felt your Touch but you were on another Planet
In the End– I realized it was My Turn all along
I finally recognized that I will Never get back what I gave–

Now that I was the one in Air– With Nobody to stop me
My Vision was much clearer than it was on the Ground–
But– You turned Towards me– You Yelled–
You Looked at me Again– I got to Experience your Worry– One last time
A Pitiful Look on your Face–
It Hit you that it was the Last time you saw me–
So you did Still feel Something for me Deep down
At last– My Eyes shot towards the Center Down


Scheme AXXX XXXB CXCX XXXD BXXE EXEB FXBE FXXX BXXDXBAA
Poetic Form Etheree  (20%)
Metre 1100111010101 011111 11110101 111011110 111101101101 101010 11111011110010 00101100100 11101010101111 10101101010 110100111111111 11101101 1111111101011 011110 01010101101 0101101 110111010 1101111 111110 010111101101 11111011111111 11111111111011110 1111111111 11111011 11010 1111 111011111111 1101110111111 11101111110 1111110101010 0011101111101 1100101111011111 1111010111111 1101110111101 11101111 1111011110100110111 01001111 111111011111 11111101111 11111010101
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,868
Words 365
Sentences 2
Stanzas 9
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 8
Lines Amount 40
Letters per line (avg) 34
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 151
Words per stanza (avg) 40

About this poem

This poem is about a tragedy between two people. One person has a cat which is the thing they love the most in the world. They promised the cat and themselves that if the cat died, they would die with the cat. The speaker and the person used to be in a relationship, the person didn't have feelings for them anymore but the speaker did. The speaker knew about that promise and found out the cat died. As soon as they heard the news, they hurried towards the house of their love. The person that was about to kill themselves. The speaker managed to convince the person to not do it. The person didn't show a lot of appreciation. The speaker had no hope anymore and recognized that no matter how hard they tried, they would never get the love of the person back. The speaker was so upset that they convinced themselves that they should be the one dead. As they were about to die, they saw the person did feel saddened. In a way, it made the speaker happy that the person still had some feelin 

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Written on January 29, 2023

Submitted by lizzyredltg on January 29, 2023

Modified on March 14, 2023

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Rosemarie Diederichs

I grew up in Germany and lived there until the age of 13 when I moved to the US. I enjoy listening to music and all kinds of art. I wrote this for a school assignment and saw that I really got into it. more…

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