Analysis of My Sirius
Hanny_honiebee19 2001 (Calubian, Leyte)
I'm laying in the bed,
with dark thoughts in my head.
The thoughts that turn into my heart's shred,
As I look at the beauty of someone laying and dead.
I thought everything was just a dream.
I'm ok, but I'm not fine 'cause my eyes are cream.
A creamy eyes that makes me blind,
but it's clear that I have feet but I can't stand.
I am lost in the darkness but you are my sirius.
You showed life and it's mysterious.
Though I feel pain and it's sad.
I pushed you, became selfish and made you sad and mad.
I am a sinner and I know 'cause it's obvious.
Why love me if it's dangerous?
Everytime I hear the clock, my heart shakes.
The solemn night was drowning me and killing me awake.
Someone accepts me but she's a liar.
She's my mom who knows I'm fragile.
She's the best and I'm not.
I feel sorry but sorry is not enough.
She works hard for me and provide the things I wanted.
It's such a shame that I'm not contented.
Sad memories but those are reality.
How come we are a victim of poverty?
One day she didn't came home,
I'm worried and was left alone.
No calls and text, 'till someone told me that she's already gone.
My life seems already done.
My liar mother didn't tell me she's sick.
Seeing her laying in the coffin makes me want the horse kick.
I wanted those kicks 'till I became numb.
But damn my heart exploded like a bomb.
I touched your face and you looked happy.
You are beautiful and whispered as I say.
"If I do my best in school and become a better person, mom, can you wake up?"
"Promise I will be on top but please stand up!"
You didn't respond but a tear came out from your eye.
A cold wind embraced me as it passed by.
I saw her soul leaving me with a smile.
A smile visibly showed unconditional love until she died.
Scheme | AAAA BBXX CCDD CCCX XXXX EEFF XXXX GGXX FCHH IIXX |
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Poetic Form | Quatrain (30%) |
Metre | 110001 111011 011101111 1111010111001 11101101 111111111111 01011111 11111111111 111001011111 111010100 1111011 1110110011101 1101001111100 11111100 101101111 01011101010101 101111010 11111110 101011 11101101101 1111100101110 1101111010 110011110 11110101100 1111011 11001101 11011111110101 1110101 11010101111 100100010111011 1101111011 1111010101 111101110 11100010111 11111010010101011111 10111111111 1100110111111 0110111111 1101101101 011001010010111 |
Closest metre | Iambic pentameter |
Characters | 1,762 |
Words | 395 |
Sentences | 36 |
Stanzas | 10 |
Stanza Lengths | 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4 |
Lines Amount | 40 |
Letters per line (avg) | 33 |
Words per line (avg) | 9 |
Letters per stanza (avg) | 131 |
Words per stanza (avg) | 36 |
About this poem
About someone who passed away
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Written on October 29, 2022
Submitted by hannylenp on October 29, 2022
Modified on March 05, 2023
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