Analysis of Closed With You



Closed With You

Is it normal to feel someone you have never meet, you don't even see her face? But when I saw you in my dream I knew you are my lover and felt you as I have never felt before. I feel flying to paradise with your kiss and remember its taste when I wake up looking for you beside me in bed. It was Salsabil taste like the taste of paradaise river.

Honey. You ask who? On the walls that keep us away.  Or at the time as the sands of time?
Is not this. Let me see. Ahhh I'm wrong, you will never touch my face with eyeballs. But the psychic would know, this lip. You enjoy the deep stretching your eyes closed In the subconscious space. It favors us. Although not my night was your evening. Your morning is not my morning.  Ahmed, my men. Catch me. Do not let me run.

Honey how could i let u run after i felt u in my arms? Really i can't. I want to keep you so close. So I can hear the beats of your hear. Feel thirsty for your  lips can't leave them forever. Hope if time stops now while we are together feeling all of you.  Your lips are the taste of paradaise river but i want to swim in this river.

Ahh.  Do not you play my lips like that. I want to make you get.But do not kill me first. Naughty kiss you made me stop. You have become a great thief. Never someone tried to kiss me in such a way that even in dreams and imagination that made me go up to the tower. Ahmed, My dear. I will be rivers. Keep it will never make you sink.

Honey you taught me to be a theif after you stole my soul.  How could  I feel my lovely diamond that close and don't take her? Sure I will remove that covering my diamond and take it all kissing every inch of you. Yeaa now I  really feel Im swimming in my Salsabil drinking till I feel full. Drinking you till you moan loudly my name telling take me.

Ahmed.  Do you want heard me call your name? Every our breath make we more be naughty?
My love. I know im take your soul. Do you know way? I want you eat all my body. So how you will feel if not touch it.  I want you hold my body like you get diamond. So, you must be smart to save it. Or another will take from your hands fast. Enjoy with me. Like you after wake up when you tired.  Its like heaven wind. Make we more calm, Ahmed.  Feel me like im not only your foods. But your breath in your chest. Ahmed, Im still let you bite my lips. So much you  wanted it. Dear hug me tight.

Off course my lovely Salsabila. You are my future.


Scheme X A XX A X B BX A
Poetic Form
Metre 111 1110111111011110101111110111111110011111101011110110111001011111110110110111111011110 1011110111101110110111 1111111111110111111010111110101101110001011101111111101101111010111111111 1011111110111011101111111111111011111101111110101111111101010111111011110111110110 111111111111111111111011111110101110111110101110010001011111101010111111011110111 10111110110111111111101011011011101110011001111010011111110111001110111110111110111011 1011111111100101111110 1111111111111111111011111111111111101111011111111101011111101111110111110111011111101111110111110111011111111111011111 11110111110
Characters 2,452
Words 518
Sentences 64
Stanzas 8
Stanza Lengths 1, 1, 2, 1, 1, 1, 2, 1
Lines Amount 10
Letters per line (avg) 185
Words per line (avg) 51
Letters per stanza (avg) 231
Words per stanza (avg) 64

About this poem

Colaboration between me and someone from Egypt. Telling about deep feeling. Altogh still not to know each other in real but can feel together deep blue.

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Submitted by talita99latifah on October 27, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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