Analysis of Alderamin Is Falling

Jimmy Ash 1983 (Saint Louis, Missouri)



A feeling as old as this tree I carve our names into.
It never fails, the memories burn with every branch.
This night sky never looked so bright in your warmth,
But I see our star is falling...

When did this heart get so jaded?
A supercharged pain that bleeds me from the inside.
They say that our love is stronger than this world could hold,
But its gravity is pulling me down.

I tried to turn a blind eye from the pain that sleeps in me.
But all in all, I'm forced to fall into those tragic lullabies.
This bliss was a facade of everything I ever wanted,
But again, our star is falling...

When did this heart get so jaded?
A supercharged pain that bleeds me from the inside.
They say that our love is stronger than this world could hold,
But its gravity is pulling me down.

So now I sit and wonder why I wrote this song,
That time will set you free to know where you belong.
And I'll burn my hands putting this star back in the sky,
As long as I can breathe, that love will never die...


Scheme xxxa BCDE xxba BCDE ffgg
Poetic Form Quatrain  (20%)
Metre 010111111110101 11010100111001 11110111011 111101110 11111110 00111111001 11110111011111 1110011011 11110111011101 110111110111010 11100111011010 101101110 11111110 00111111001 11110111011111 1110011011 111101011111 111111111101 0111110111001 111111111101
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,027
Words 218
Sentences 14
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 20
Letters per line (avg) 38
Words per line (avg) 10
Letters per stanza (avg) 152
Words per stanza (avg) 39

About this poem

A song for Sweetpea.

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Written on August 01, 2011

Submitted by JimmyAsh83 on June 08, 2022

Modified on March 09, 2023

1:06 min read
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Jimmy Ash

I had numerous poems published since 1998, when I was a teenager in my Sophomore year. Aspiring novelist. more…

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