Analysis of Hanging Up The Cleats

Lawrence S. Pertillar 1947 (Connecticut)



After years competing in a race to chase,
A doing even better...
At anytime or place.
On a road one takes,
To pave a path one originates.
With a making mistakes.
Only the one knows made to eliminate.
There comes that time,
When a success to achieve it...
Nolonger is in need to prove to anyone.
That what has been accomplished to do,
Knowing it done.
For many years endeavored,
In a nonstopping run.
One's hanging up the cleats,
Still will leave many behind.
Discovering to find,
Their minds awakening to a time...
Already adventured to explore.
Yet attempting to catch up,
To what they had ignored.
Leaving them excited.
Although...
That discovery,
To welcome found to find...
Has left those to have adventured.
And living to explore?
Doing the very best they can to pretend,
Not to be bored by listening...
To those beginning to notice,
The Sun rises in the morning
And the Sun sets before night falls.
With this actually done,
As the Earth rotates and orbits...
Around a fixed Sun that does not move.

'Really?
Then...
If the trees create the air we breathe,
Why do people catch diseases,
And trees don't?
Wouldn't they need to be vaccinated too?'

'You see those cleats hanging up,
On that wall over there?'

'Yes.
You use to run a lot?'

'Sure did.
There was a time I was afraid,
Of being caught.
So I just kept running and running.
As fast as I could.
To distance myself from ignorance.'

'I wish I knew how to recognize it.'

'I have found it interesting to discover,
At my age...
There is no getting away from it.
And once one learns,
Where it comes from to be done...
It is amazing the number of people,
Who can not see...
The forest for the trees or the meaning,
Of dawn to make clear what reality is.'

'And...
What is the meaning of dawn?'

'There are a few definitions for it.
I'll use one I especially like.
It done dawned on me,
I should have said nothing about running.'

'It should have dawned.
Not done dawned.'

'And you should have been gone,
Long to have dawned to go.'

'Huh?
What are you saying?'

'It's beginning to look a lot like Christmas.
What do you think I'm saying?


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Poetic Form Tetractys  (29%)
Metre 10101000111 0101010 11011 10111 11011010 101001 1001111010 1111 10011011 110111110 111101011 1011 1101010 0011 110101 1111001 010011 110100101 0101101 1010111 111101 101010 1 10100 110111 111111 010101 10010111101 11111100 11010110 01100010 00110111 111001 1011010 010111111 10 1 101010111 11101010 011 10111110001 1111101 111101 1 111101 11 11011101 1101 111110010 11111 11011100 111111101 11111001010 111 111100111 0111 1111111 11010010110 1111 0101011010 111111101 0 1101011 110101011 11110101 11111 1111100110 1111 111 011111 111111 1 11110 10101101110 1111110
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 2,097
Words 468
Sentences 52
Stanzas 13
Stanza Lengths 35, 6, 2, 2, 6, 1, 9, 2, 4, 2, 2, 2, 2
Lines Amount 75
Letters per line (avg) 21
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 121
Words per stanza (avg) 29
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Submitted by lpahtillah on February 10, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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