Analysis of Dark Carousel Ride



I stand in line waiting my turn.
Why am I even standing hear I never learn. I am feeling  uneasy so nervously pacing, but you said this time would be different.
You tell me it is safe and there is no need to worry, That I am safe on this dark carousel ride.
Mommy please you lied before, this is a mistake I can feel it deep in my core.

the last time we rode you lost control.
Here we go aging down this dark rabbit hole.
I tug and I scream fighting for you to stop but then put my feelings aside . Here we go again on this dark carousel ride.
The skies seem so bright and there’s not a cloud in the sky.
Besides this time you say it’s different , why not give it a try.
Let me get on this carousel ride.
I get on the ride and it’s starts to shake .
I don’t think it’s is stable it’s starting to break.
There some loose bolts they were loosened by the candy dealer.
Turns out this dark carousel ride is a killer.
You keep on eating The candy Though it rotten your teeth.
The ride destroys your mind but to get off you keep get cold feet . Can’t seem to get off this dark carrousel ride.
 I say my peace and bid you goodbye I can’t truly say I have not enjoyed this 30 year ride.
So goodbye mother I hope one day you will see.
That I did all I could but it’s it’s up to you not me.


Scheme XXAX BBACCADDEEXAAFF
Poetic Form
Metre 11011011 11110101110111100101100101111111100 111111011111101111111101 10111011100111111011 011111101 11110111101 110111011111111100111101111101 0111101101001 0111111100111101 11111101 1110101111 111111011011 11111010101010 11111011010 11110010111011 0101111111111111111111101 111101111110111101111 11101111111 11111111111111
Closest metre Iambic octameter
Characters 1,283
Words 263
Sentences 22
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 4, 15
Lines Amount 19
Letters per line (avg) 51
Words per line (avg) 14
Letters per stanza (avg) 488
Words per stanza (avg) 134

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A glimpse into a child of a drug addict

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Submitted by aleida.calfucura on August 12, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

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