Analysis of What I could've become



I'm finally a doctor, treating patients
A superb wife and two kids , very blatant
Wishes he who has barely formed a nerve,
What change could he make in the society he served?

A teenager working hard for his dream,
Curiousity flowing through his bloodstream,
From school to study table his routine oscillates,
Almirahs populated with countless accolades.

A kid who spoke nothing but truth,
Hides the pillow a broken milk tooth,
He sleeps with a wish in his head,
Wakes up with a disappointed morning instead.

Borrowing blood from his mouther's womb,
He rests comfortably in his little room,
Observes his legs,fist and tiny toes form,
Until abortion blows him like a storm.


Scheme XXXX AAXX BBCC DDEE
Poetic Form Quatrain  (50%)
Metre 11000101010 00110111010 1011110101 1111100010011 010101111 110111 111101010110 110011010 01111011 101001011 11101011 11100101001 10011111 11100001101 011101011 0101011101
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 656
Words 114
Sentences 4
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 16
Letters per line (avg) 34
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 135
Words per stanza (avg) 29

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Submitted by VectorSurreal on August 03, 2021

Modified by VectorSurreal on August 03, 2021

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