Analysis of I'll Make You Proud, Mamma



" I'll Make You Proud Mamma "

Out here on my own, for quite some time now,
Still see every day, those things you warned me about,
Does not matter whose corner you're in,I'll get thru it somehow,
You know when it comes right down to it, I love to shout,
No more mister nice guy,I'm done playing games,
Come find out, push me again, put hands on me one more time,
You already know I bieve in "God", I am not going down in flames,
Stop calling the law on me, they know I have committed no crime,
She raised me well,she was the only one who showed me she really cared bout me,
Nobody else understood, nobody cared like you did, ill never forget,
If anybody understood me and got close, they hurt me, you said wait and see,
You never lied to me, you never said anything you would regret,
I am out here everyday trying to find a woman just like you,
I might be wasting my time though, it might be no use,
I don't think I'll ever find a woman with love so true,
I take it every day, the talking shit, the lies that got no Juice,
You were always there for me like no other,no matter what,
I'll never forget, when you protected me from the flying dresser,
No matter what kind of crazy was thrown from the gut,
You were always there to talk to about it, even when I was the aggressor,
I made some major mistakes,I know, can't go back and change it now,
I am too tired of all this pain, misery, hard times, and drama,
Everything that I am,the good father,and all, you showed me how,
One day, I promise, "I'll Make You Proud, Mamma".


Scheme A BCBCDEDEFGFGHIHIJKJKBABA
Poetic Form
Metre 111110 1111111111 1110011111101 1110110111111 1111111111111 1110111101 11111011111111 10101110111110101 1100111111101011 111110101111110111 11011111111001 1100001101111111101 1101111101101101 11111011011010111 1111011111111 11111010101111 11110010101011111 101111111101 11001110101101010 1101111011101 1011111011101110010 11110111110111 11110111110011010 101111111111 11110111110
Closest metre Iambic octameter
Characters 1,555
Words 309
Sentences 2
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 1, 24
Lines Amount 25
Letters per line (avg) 47
Words per line (avg) 12
Letters per stanza (avg) 589
Words per stanza (avg) 149

About this poem

I wrote this poem two days ago, when my mamma tried in her own way to tell me she nit gonna make it!!

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Submitted by joshualanphar on July 06, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

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