Ghost

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  AIDA

  I absolutely loved your poem, Mahmoud! Your words are profound and there is a beautiful contemplation on life and existence. The concept of life as a series of doors, unexpected paths, and hopes for unobstructed journeys is both compelling and relatable. The metaphoric representation of a ghost passing through borders, waking up with the morning, and sleeping on roses is beautiful and truly inspiring. The essence of wanting to be 'always human' even in a ghostlike state resonates strongly. Your work is gracefully translated by Hassan Hegazy, introducing this well-crafted piece to those who don't speak your native language.
  
  As for improvement suggestions, some may benefit from slightly more clarity on the context or the metaphorical significance of 'life as a gate' and 'being a ghost'. This would deepen the readers' understanding. Also, introducing a rhythic pattern could possibly enhance the poetic experience. Remember, poetry doesn't always have to rhyme, but a rhythm builds a particular mood and helps bring coherence. Nonetheless, your poem is captivating, philosophical, and full of depth. Keep writing! more »

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