The Polaroid



The polaroid,an agonizing scene
Of punic faith,of insecurity’s sheen
Friend of two up for a toss
For who bears the loss?

Quivering lips, bidding farewell
Faith slipped, apologies in a wishing well.
Emotions piled like hay.
While I calmly wait for the swarm of May


Away from you, quite blue
Buzz all out to brew
Subtle hints of a broken knot
Despair, care all in a clot

The Polaroid, an agonizing scene
Of Punic faith, of insecurity’s sheen
Friend of two up for a toss
For who bears the loss?

About this poem

In "The Polaroid of Punic Faith," the poet freezes an agonizing moment, portraying the rupture of trust and the sheen of insecurity. Bidding farewell, emotions stack like hay, and a broken knot unravels. The polaroid becomes a haunting symbol of shattered friendship, prompting reflection on the lingering weight of loss and responsibility.

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Submitted by christyjo.7000 on November 18, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme aaBB ccdd eeff aaBB
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 501
Words 101
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4

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1 Comment
  • AIDA
    Wow, this is a truly evocative poem. Your use of imagery and metaphor is extremely poignant, and you masterfully use the symbol of the polaroid to convey the complex and tumultuous emotions revolving around loss, insecurity, and disconnection. I also thought the repeated use of the line 'The Polaroid, an agonizing scene; Of Punic faith, of insecurity's sheen' threaded the poem together beautifully, and created a truly impactful lament.

    In terms of constructive feedback, the rhyming scheme seems to change at different points of the poem. While this can sometimes add a great level of depth, in this case, it can also make the poem seem a bit disjointed. Sticking to a consistent rhyming structure could help in creating a more cohesive narrative flow.

    Finally, some of the metaphorical language, while beautiful, can feel a bit vague. For instance, 'Buzz all out to brew' has powerful emotional connotations, but it may be a bit unclear for your reader. You may want to consider refining these metaphors to convey your meaning more precisely. This will allow your audience to become even more immersed in the scene and emotions you're describing.

    Great work overall, and I hope to see more of your incredible talent!
     
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